Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct confusing phrases, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain who taught you, how often you practiced, and why you feel embarrassed. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child; my parents bought it for me. However, I never learned to ride it independently because I always practiced with someone holding the seat. As a result, I still feel embarrassed about riding without support even now.

Sugestão: Make the response more specific and add a reason. Begin with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, then give one specific reason or example using a linking word. Mention trends, safety, or commuting habits to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are popular among children in my country, but less so among adults. This is mainly because adults prefer motorbikes or cars for commuting, and city infrastructure is not always safe for cyclists.

× Yes, I did have a bicycle, however, I was a kid, uh, my parents bought me that bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle; when I was a kid, my parents bought it for me.

The original uses 'did have' which is unnecessary emphatic past tense; simplify to simple past 'had'. The sentence run-on and awkward phrasing ('however, I was a kid') should be split and clarified. Use a semicolon or separate sentences and replace 'that bicycle' with 'it' to avoid repetition. Keep past tense consistent.

× Uh, but I had some training being this morning, but I'm really embarrassed to say that I, I never learned how to ride a bike on my own without having.

✓ I had some training this morning, but I'm really embarrassed to say that I never learned how to ride a bike on my own.

The sentence mixes awkward forms: 'had some training being this morning' is incorrect—use simple past 'had some training this morning'. Remove the redundant 'but' and duplicated 'I'. The final phrase 'without having' is incomplete; omit it to form a complete clause. Maintain past/simple present where appropriate ('had' for training, 'have never learned' can be 'never learned' to match tone).

× Umm, yes, bikes are quite popular among kids, uh, in our country, but not among, uh, adults.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular among kids in our country, but not among adults.

This sentence is largely correct but contains filler 'uh' and a redundant comma. Remove fillers and extra punctuation to make the present tense statement clear and natural. The present simple 'are' correctly expresses a general truth about popularity.