Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronouns, and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish the description (e.g., what made it special).

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child my parents bought me a small pink bicycle so I could learn to ride in our garden. It had training wheels at first, which made me feel safe, and I remember practicing every afternoon until I could ride without them.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion sentence, correct grammar (especially articles and verb forms), and support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Be concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because it is small and many cities have good bike lanes. In addition, cycling is cheap and healthy, so people often use bikes for short trips or daily exercise.

× Yeah, when I'm at when I'm a young, my parents bought me a bicycle to let me learn how to ride a bike and I can ride in my garden.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, my parents bought me a bicycle so I could learn how to ride a bike and ride in my garden.

The original mixes present tense 'I'm' with a past event 'my parents bought me'. Use past tense 'I was' to match the time frame (Present tense issue). Also change 'to let me learn' to 'so I could learn' for natural past-purpose phrasing, and 'I can ride' to 'ride' to keep past narration consistent. Suggestions: Use consistent past tense for past experiences; replace awkward infinitive phrases with 'so' + modal in past ('could').

× And this bike were pink and it was very.

✓ And this bike was pink and very pretty.

'Bike' is singular, so the verb should be 'was' not 'were' (subject-verb agreement). The clause 'and it was very' is incomplete; add an adjective like 'pretty' to complete the sentence. Suggestions: Ensure singular nouns take singular verbs; complete predicates with appropriate adjectives.

× I think that most people in my country are having bikes no matter they are when they are young or they when they grow up.

✓ I think that most people in my country have bikes whether they are young or grown up.

'Are having' is incorrect for possession in this context; simple present 'have' is used for general facts (Present tense issue). 'No matter they are when they are young or they when they grow up' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'whether they are young or grown up'. Suggestions: Use simple present for habitual or general truths; use 'whether' for alternatives.

× And this is because our country are very small and riding a bike in different city is easy and it is it and it is also healthy.

✓ This is because our country is very small, and riding a bike in different cities is easy; it is also healthy.

'Country' is singular, so use 'is' not 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Use plural 'cities' after 'different' and remove the repeated 'it is'. Combine ideas with proper punctuation for clarity. Suggestions: Match verb number to the subject; use plural nouns when referring to multiple places; avoid unnecessary repetition.