Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and precise: use one clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific detail. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word if you add detail.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike, but I did have a bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon, which was about a mile away, and I really enjoyed the freedom it gave me.

Sugestão: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, avoid fillers and unclear phrases, and provide one or two specific supporting details (e.g., statistics or examples). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'efficient' not 'efficiently').

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many food delivery workers use bicycles and e-bikes, which creates jobs and offers an efficient way to navigate busy streets.

× I used to ride it when I was a kid and I enjoyed a lot.

✓ I used to ride it when I was a kid, and I enjoyed it a lot.

Missing object after the verb 'enjoyed' makes the sentence incomplete. Use the noun or pronoun object 'it' after 'enjoyed' and place 'a lot' after the object for natural word order. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses.

× Yes, of course they are very popular.

✓ Yes, of course they are very popular in my country.

The original sentence is grammatically correct, but adding 'in my country' clarifies the context of the question about popularity. No tense change is needed; present simple 'are' is appropriate for general statements.

× There have been a lot of bikes in the delivery section where people deliver food uh umm uh it gives a lot of employment as well uh at the same time there are E bikes uh, which is again like efficiently.

✓ There are a lot of bikes in the delivery sector where people deliver food; they provide a lot of employment as well. At the same time, there are e-bikes, which are more efficient.

Multiple issues: 'There have been' is awkward for a current general situation; use present 'There are'. 'Section' is better replaced by 'sector'. 'It gives a lot of employment' is incorrect because 'bikes' is plural, so use plural subject 'they provide' (subject-verb agreement). Run-on sentence and filler words should be removed; split into two sentences for clarity. 'E bikes' should be formatted as 'e-bikes' and phrase 'which is again like efficiently' is ungrammatical; correct to 'which are more efficient' using comparative adjective and agreeing plurality.