Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid filler words like "exactly" and "yeah." Use a linking word to connect your supporting detail (e.g., "because" or "so").

Exemplo: I didn’t own a bike as a child, but I often used my older brother’s. Because he let me borrow it regularly, I learned to ride early and spent many afternoons exploring the neighborhood.

Sugestão: Open with a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" and "for example"). Avoid repetition of the main point at the end. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "widely used," "families," "commute").

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many families use them for short trips and children often ride after school. For example, in the evenings I frequently see groups of kids cycling around parks and lanes, which shows how common cycling is.

× I used to ride it and it was really good.

✓ I used to ride it, and it was really fun.

The original sentence uses 'good' which is grammatically fine but semantically awkward for describing enjoyment. Replacing with 'fun' better fits the intended meaning. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× everyone basically has a bike older or younger

✓ everyone basically has a bike, whether older or younger

The phrase 'older or younger' is incorrectly placed and lacks a preposition. Insert 'whether' to introduce the contrast and add commas for clarity. 'Everyone' is singular as a distributive pronoun but 'has a bike' is correct; the issue is the missing conjunction/preposition.

× I see almost everyone, especially children, riding a bike around evening time.

✓ I see almost everyone, especially children, riding bikes in the evening.

Maintain present simple 'I see' but change 'a bike' to plural 'bikes' to match 'everyone'/'children' (collective) and use 'in the evening' rather than 'around evening time' for natural phrasing.

× Yeah, I think it's really popular in my country because everyone basically has a bike older or younger and I see almost everyone, especially children, riding a bike around evening time.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because almost everyone, whether older or younger, has one, and I often see children and adults riding bikes in the evening.

The original is a run-on with awkward phrase order and repetition. Break into clearer parts, use 'whether' to connect 'older or younger', replace 'a bike' with 'one' or 'bikes' to avoid awkward singular/plural mismatch, and reorder 'children and adults' for natural flow. Use 'in the evening' and 'often' for natural frequency expression.