Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh) and use linking words (because, so, therefore). Also correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "when I was a child", "my father couldn't afford one"). Limit to up to five sentences and give one or two specific details (e.g., how you traveled or who you rode with).

Exemplo: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Moreover, they preferred we used public transport for safety reasons, especially since we were under 18. As a result, I mostly commuted to school and work by bus, which taught me to be punctual.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and use precise vocabulary. Reduce repetition and filler words. Use a linking word to support your reason (for example, "because" or "since") and add a specific example or comparison (e.g., cost difference, traffic conditions). Keep it within five sentences and avoid repeating words like "popular" and "are there."

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much more affordable than cars. For example, the average price of a motorcycle is one-fifth that of a small car, so many people choose bikes for daily commuting. Additionally, bikes are easier to park and navigate through congested city streets, which makes them a practical choice.

× Uh, actually I didn't have a bike, uh, when I was child, uh, because of my father couldn't afford that one.

✓ Uh, actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my father couldn't afford one.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and unnecessary 'because of' with full clause. Use 'when I was a child' (article 'a' required). 'Because of' should be followed by a noun phrase; for a clause use 'because'. Also remove redundant 'that' before 'one'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and 'because my father couldn't afford one'.

× And my father didn't allow us to ride, uh, the bike until, because we are, uh, we were under 18, so mostly work and public transport we were using in.

✓ My father didn't allow us to ride the bike because we were under 18, so we mostly used public transport or went to work.

Errors: incorrect conjunction 'until, because' and mixed tenses. Use a single reason conjunction 'because'. 'We are, we were' mixes present and past — keep past 'we were under 18'. Word order 'mostly work and public transport we were using in' is ungrammatical; correct to 'we mostly used public transport or went to work'. Also remove unnecessary commas and filler words.

× Actually bikes are more popular in my country than cars because bikes are affordable or or and car is more expensive in my country.

✓ Actually bikes are more popular in my country than cars because bikes are affordable and cars are more expensive.

Errors: awkward coordination 'or or and' and number agreement 'car is' should be plural 'cars are' when comparing to 'bikes'. Keep present simple for general fact: 'are more popular', 'are affordable', 'are more expensive'. Remove repeated words and simplify conjunction to 'and'.

× So yes uh bikes are more popular and you will see everywhere on the road bikes are there.

✓ So yes, bikes are more popular and you will see bikes everywhere on the road.

Errors: redundant and awkward phrasing 'you will see everywhere on the road bikes are there'. Correct word order is 'you will see bikes everywhere on the road'. Remove filler 'uh' and extra 'are there'. Keep consistent present simple for general observation.