Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (verb tenses and articles), clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and articles, add one or two concise supporting details, and avoid extra words. Use linking words if adding details. For example, say you received the bike, who you rode with, and one memory or reason why you liked it.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents bought a bicycle for me when I was six, and I rode it every day with my best friend and my siblings. Because we lived near a park, we often raced there after school, which made me confident and independent.

Sugestão: Clarify the main idea and correct grammar, vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Use correct countable/uncountable forms (e.g., 'bikes are'), correct linking words (because, so, therefore), and accurate word choice (e.g., 'common', 'environmentally friendly').

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Because cities are becoming more crowded and people want cheaper, eco-friendly transport, many commuters use bikes for short trips, especially students and delivery workers.

× When I was a child my parents had brought back for me and I always ride this bike every day with my best friends and with my sisters brothers. After.

✓ When I was a child my parents brought a bike back for me, and I rode this bike every day with my best friends and my sisters and brothers.

Errors involve misuse of the past perfect 'had brought' and present-tense 'ride' in a past context. Use simple past for completed past actions: 'brought' (not 'had brought') and 'rode' (past tense of 'ride'). Also fix word order and list punctuation: 'brought a bike back for me' and 'my sisters and brothers'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when recounting childhood events and use simple past unless referring to an action completed before another past action (which is not the case here).

× Yeah, I think bike are probably in my country because due to the rapid development of technology, the shirt bike a everywhere it is a green transportation methods today.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are probably common in my country because, due to the rapid development of technology, short bikes are everywhere; they are green transportation methods today.

Multiple errors: 'bike are' mismatches number—use plural 'bikes are'. 'the shirt bike a everywhere' has word-choice and structure errors; likely meant 'short bikes are everywhere'. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('they are') and plural noun agreement with 'methods' (or better 'a green mode of transportation'). Also remove redundant 'because'/'due to' combination; keep one. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and match verbs to their subjects, choose appropriate nouns ('short bikes' or 'shared bikes') and use clearer phrases like 'a green mode of transportation'.