Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, clarity and cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tenses and precise vocabulary, and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add a linking word when giving extra detail and avoid repetitions. For example, say when you had the bike, who taught you, and whether you still ride now with a reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle when I was about six, and my parents taught me how to ride it in our local park. However, I rarely ride now because I live in a busy city and usually take public transport.

Sugestão: Make your main point clear first, then support it with specific, coherent details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'shared bikes' not 'sharing bags') and grammar, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Mention who uses them, why, and give a brief example or comparison.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially shared bicycles among young and middle-aged people. They are convenient for short trips because you can pick one up and drop it off anywhere, so many commuters prefer them for last-mile travel.

× I have. I had a back when I was very young and I started to study how to ride a bike through the help of my parents.

✓ I had a bike when I was very young, and I learned how to ride it with the help of my parents.

The student mixed present perfect 'I have' with past context and used awkward phrasing 'had a back' and 'started to study how to ride a bike through the help of my parents.' Use simple past for past events ('I had', 'I learned') and natural expressions: 'learned how to ride' and 'with the help of my parents.' This improves tense consistency and idiomatic wording.

× And yeah, I can't ride a bike commercially right now.

✓ And yeah, I can't ride a bike properly right now.

The word 'commercially' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'properly' or 'well.' Replace with the appropriate adverb 'properly' to convey ability/skill. Also keep present ability 'can't' consistent with 'right now.'

× Yeah, Daphne calls, you know, in China, sharing bags are very popular among the young people and people in the middle age 'cause it is very convenient for the people when they, uh, are commute or just traveling in the certain city.

✓ Yeah, in China, shared bikes are very popular among young people and middle-aged people because they are very convenient when commuting or traveling within a city.

Multiple errors: 'Daphne calls' is irrelevant or incorrect—removed. 'Sharing bags' should be 'shared bikes.' 'People in the middle age' should be 'middle-aged people.' Use 'because' rather than informal ''cause.' Verb form 'are commute' is wrong; use 'commuting.' 'In the certain city' is unidiomatic; use 'within a city.' This fixes vocabulary, adjective forms, preposition and verb form errors.

× So I think it's definitely proper image.

✓ So I think they are definitely popular.

The original sentence 'proper image' is unclear and ungrammatical in this context. The student likely means 'they are popular' or 'it gives a good image.' Using 'they are definitely popular' matches the question about popularity and corrects sentence structure and pronoun reference.