Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, like) and repetitions. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., ‘after school’ not ‘after work’).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle and I used to ride it with my friends after school. For about two hours each day we would race around the neighborhood and explore nearby parks, which made me feel very happy and free.

Sugestão: Give a more general statement first, then support it with specific, relevant examples. Use linking words for coherence (for example, because, for instance, after that). Avoid personal details that are unclear (e.g., ‘client’) and reduce disfluencies.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people cycle for exercise and commuting, and several cycling clubs organize weekend rides. For instance, I cycle with friends every weekend and we usually finish our ride by stopping at a food stall for porridge.

× Yes, I did I used to play with my friends after work uh, after after finishing my class and I played with my friends for two hours like resting the rest like bike racing. I feel happy because at the time uh.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to play with my friends after finishing my classes, and we would ride bikes for about two hours, sometimes racing. I felt happy at that time.

The original contains run-on sentences, repetition, tense inconsistency and unclear phrasing. This fits 'Sentence structure errors' because clauses are not properly separated and ideas are muddled. Corrections: add a period after 'Yes, I did' to separate responses; change 'after work uh, after after finishing my class' to 'after finishing my classes' to remove repetition and use the plural 'classes' which is more natural; replace 'I played with my friends for two hours like resting the rest like bike racing' with 'we would ride bikes for about two hours, sometimes racing' to clarify activity and use consistent past habit ('used to' or 'would'); change 'I feel happy because at the time uh' to past tense 'I felt happy at that time' to match the past context. Suggestions: keep sentences short and clear, avoid filler words, ensure tense consistency for past narratives, and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because uh, I have a client actually that has a cycling hobby.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because I have a friend who enjoys cycling.

The original uses 'client' which is unlikely in this context and uses 'that' for a person; this is an incorrect or unnatural pronoun/word choice. This fits 'Incorrect use of pronouns' because 'that' should be 'who' when referring to people and 'client' is semantically odd. Correction: use 'friend' (or 'someone I know') and use 'who' for people: 'a friend who enjoys cycling.' Suggestion: use 'who' for people and choose appropriate nouns for relationships.

× So every weekend, uh, we do cycling together and have a some race.

✓ So every weekend we cycle together and sometimes have a race.

The phrase 'do cycling' is awkward; English uses the verb 'cycle' rather than 'do cycling.' Also 'have a some race' has an article/word order issue. This fits 'Verb in the present participle form' because the verb form is incorrect. Correction: use the simple present habitual 'we cycle' and 'sometimes have a race.' Suggestion: use common verbs ('cycle' or 'go cycling') and remove unnecessary articles; for habitual actions use simple present.

× After that we, we come to the vendors to eat porridge.

✓ After that we go to the vendors to eat porridge.

The original uses 'come to the vendors' which is unnatural unless speaker's location is the vendors; the typical verb is 'go to the vendors.' This is an 'Incorrect use of prepositions' / verb + preposition combination. Correction: 'go to the vendors' is natural. Suggestion: use 'go to' when moving to a place away from the speaker and 'come to' only when movement is toward the speaker's location. Also remove repeated 'we,'.