Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct vocabulary, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct mistakes (badge → bike) and use past simple consistently. Avoid redundant phrasing like "didn't use this more"; say "I stopped using it" or "I used it less as I got older."

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, as I grew older I used it less because I started traveling by motorbike and public transport. For example, by age 13 I mostly rode with my parents on their motorbike, so my own bike gathered dust.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific, coherent reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary: say "somewhat common" or "not very common", and refer to "motorbikes" rather than "vehicle bike." Avoid filler words like "uh."

Exemplo: I think bikes are somewhat common in Vietnam, but they are not as popular as motorbikes. For instance, most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting in busy cities. Therefore, bicycles are mainly used for exercise or by children rather than as a main mode of transport.

× Yes, I did have a badge when I was a child. However since I started growing up I didn't use this more and that's why it started dropping down.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. However, as I grew up I didn't use it much, and that's why I stopped riding it.

The student used 'badge' instead of 'bike' (wrong vocabulary). 'Since I started growing up' is awkward for past change; use 'as I grew up' to indicate gradual change. 'I didn't use this more' is ungrammatical and should be 'I didn't use it much' to express decreased use. 'It started dropping down' is incorrect for a bike; use 'I stopped riding it' to convey cessation. Also corrected tense consistency: 'did have' is acceptable for emphasis, but 'as I grew up' and 'stopped riding' correctly place actions in the past and make the sentence natural.

× I would say is somewhat common, but it's not super common in my country Vietnam.

✓ I would say it is somewhat common, but it's not very common in my country, Vietnam.

The original omits the subject 'it' before 'is' (sentence structure/subject omission). 'Somewhat common' is fine but more natural with 'it is somewhat common.' 'Not super common' is informal; 'not very common' is more standard. Added a comma before 'Vietnam' for clarity.

× And uh, the most vehicles that Vietnamese people is used start using are motorbike or vehicle bike.

✓ And, the vehicles that most Vietnamese people use are motorbikes or scooters.

The original has multiple issues: 'the most vehicles that Vietnamese people is used start using' mixes tenses and has subject-verb disagreement ('people is' should be 'people use'). 'Motorbike or vehicle bike' is awkward; 'motorbikes or scooters' is clearer and plural to match 'people'. Simplified structure to 'the vehicles that most Vietnamese people use are...' to be grammatical and natural.