Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and contradictory remarks (saying you weren’t a fan after describing using bikes). Use linking words like "however" or "so" to make your points coherent. Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a brief reason or specific memory to add content.

Exemplo: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child. My brothers all had bikes, so I used to borrow theirs and ride around the neighborhood after school. However, I still preferred walking because I found it more relaxing.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "people who are the people from my country" and "join us of cycling ceremonies"). Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "for instance". Mention one or two concrete facts (e.g., cycling events, commuting, bike lanes) to strengthen your answer and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, cities often organize weekend cycling events and there are growing networks of bike lanes in urban areas.

× Well, actually, no, I didn't have a bike of my own, but my brother had a bike.

✓ Well, actually, no, I didn't have a bike of my own, but my brother did.

Using 'had a bike' twice is repetitive; more natural to replace the second clause's verb with 'did' to avoid repetition and maintain correct past tense. Suggestion: use auxiliary 'did' to refer back to the earlier verb.

× Actually, all my siblings had one except for me and I used to steal the, uh, their bikes and wander around the neighborhood.

✓ Actually, all my siblings had one except me, and I used to steal their bikes and wander around the neighborhood.

Error: incorrect insertion of both 'the' and 'their' before 'bikes' (redundant determiners). Also 'except for me' is acceptable but 'except me' is more natural here. Suggestion: remove the extra article and keep 'their bikes'.

× Umm, I'm not actually a big fan of them, but if I wanted to say that, uh.

✓ Umm, I'm not actually a big fan of bikes, to be honest.

Original sentence is incomplete and vague ('if I wanted to say that' leaves the thought unfinished). Also 'them' is vague. Suggestion: complete the idea and use a clear noun 'bikes' and a natural phrase like 'to be honest'. This addresses sentence structure and pronoun clarity (types 12 and 26).

× I think bikes are something that you can find in my country a lot because, umm, many people who are the people from my country, they love cycling a lot and they join us of cycling ceremonies.

✓ I think bikes are very common in my country because many people love cycling, and they take part in cycling events.

Multiple problems: wordy and redundant phrase 'many people who are the people from my country' should be simplified to 'many people'; 'you can find in my country a lot' is awkward — use 'very common'; 'they join us of cycling ceremonies' is ungrammatical — use 'take part in cycling events'. Suggestions: simplify and use natural collocations ('very common', 'take part in', 'cycling events').