Headphones— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'you will be out of focus to your surrounding' -> 'you might lose awareness of your surroundings'). Keep within 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I usually don't use headphones. Instead, I play music through my phone’s speaker because I like to stay aware of my surroundings, especially when I'm outside. For example, I can hear traffic or announcements, which makes me feel safer.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly (specify a type) or explain clearly why you don't use any. Use clear linking words and correct grammar; avoid repeating the same idea. Provide one specific example to support your reason.

Exemplo: I don't usually use headphones; if I do, I prefer lightweight on-ear models because they are comfortable and allow some outside noise in. However, most of the time I use my phone’s speaker so I can hear what's happening around me in public places.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you would use headphones, then add specific details and a cohesive linking phrase. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I used headphones during an exam in Montreal a few years ago; it helped me concentrate'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I would use headphones when I need to concentrate, for example during a listening exam. A few years ago in Montreal I used headphones for the Antelex USRN test, and they helped me block out background noise so I could focus on the questions.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about situations where headphones are inappropriate, then list 2–3 specific conditions using linking words. Remove hesitations ('um', 'uh') and correct grammar. Be specific about reasons (e.g., respect, rules, safety).

Exemplo: I avoid using headphones in places where they are inappropriate or prohibited. For instance, in church services it's disrespectful and many workplaces ban them for safety or professional reasons, so I always follow those rules.

× I don't normally use headphones, I prefer using my own phone while listening to the music or other things.

✓ I don't normally use headphones; I prefer using my phone to listen to music or other things.

Run-on sentence and slightly awkward phrasing. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to join two independent clauses. 'My own phone' is acceptable but 'my phone' is more natural. Use 'to listen to' instead of 'while listening to' for clarity. Suggestion: Separate independent clauses or use conjunctions, and use 'to listen to' for purpose phrasing.

× And using headphones is also you will be out of focus to your surrounding or not be aware of what's happening because you can't hear the noise using that phone headphones.

✓ Using headphones can make you lose focus on your surroundings and make you unaware of what is happening because you cannot hear noises around you.

Awkward word order and incorrect adverb placement. 'You will be out of focus to your surrounding' is ungrammatical; use 'lose focus on your surroundings'. 'That phone headphones' is incorrect; simplify to 'around you'. Suggestion: Put verbs and objects in natural order (subject + verb + object) and use 'lose focus on' or 'be unaware of' for clarity.

× I don't normally use headphones. I prepare the speaker in my phone because I will be more aware of what's happening in my surrounding.

✓ I don't normally use headphones. I use the speaker on my phone because I am more aware of what is happening in my surroundings.

Tense and verb choice: 'prepare the speaker in my phone' is incorrect; use 'use the speaker on my phone'. 'I will be more aware' implies future when present habit is intended; use present tense 'I am more aware'. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun forms ('surroundings').

× For example, I was in in the public places I I want to hear other noises because we don't even know what's happening around us.

✓ For example, when I am in public places, I want to hear other noises because we do not always know what is happening around us.

Multiple issues: repetition ('in in', 'I I'), incorrect tense 'I was' vs habitual 'I am/when I am', and sentence run-on. Use a subordinate clause 'when I am in public places' and avoid repetition. Also use 'do not always' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use correct tense for habitual situations, and structure the sentence with a time clause.

× So I prefer not wearing headphones.

✓ So I prefer not to wear headphones.

Incorrect verb form after 'prefer'. Use infinitive 'prefer to wear' or gerund 'prefer wearing' consistently; common collocation is 'prefer not to wear'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer not to' + base verb.

× I used headphones when I took the challenging exam of Antelex USRN.

✓ I used headphones when I took the challenging Antelex USRN exam.

Word order and article omission: 'exam of Antelex USRN' is awkward; place the exam name before 'exam' or use 'the' if needed. Past tense 'used' and 'took' are correct here. Suggestion: Put modifiers before 'exam' or use 'the' for specific exams.

× It happened in Montreal a few years ago and that is the last time I used the headphone and it is very helpful because I'm doing some exam and I need to focus on what.

✓ It happened in Montreal a few years ago; that was the last time I used headphones, and they were very helpful because I was taking an exam and needed to focus.

Multiple errors: tense consistency, article and plural errors ('the headphone' should be 'headphones'), awkward clause 'I'm doing some exam and I need to focus on what' is ungrammatical. Use past tense for past events and plural 'headphones'. Clarify 'taking an exam' and 'needed to focus'. Suggestion: Keep past tenses consistent when describing past events, use plural for 'headphones', and complete the object of 'focus' if necessary.

× There is a specific things that we're not allowed to use headphones.

✓ There are specific things for which we are not allowed to use headphones.

Subject-verb agreement and determiner issues: 'There is a specific things' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'things'. Use 'There are specific things' or rephrase. Also improve relative clause to 'for which' or 'in which'. Suggestion: Match verb number to noun ('are' with 'things') and use clearer prepositional phrase.

× Most uh, importantly to attend our church service, we are umm, there to listen and not to use our own gadgets.

✓ Most importantly, when attending our church service, we are there to listen and not to use our own gadgets.

Preposition and word order errors: 'importantly to attend our church service' should be 'when attending our church service' or 'to attend church'. Add commas for clarity and remove filler words. Suggestion: Use 'when attending' or 'to attend' to introduce purpose/time clauses and place adverb 'most importantly' at the start.

× So headphones are not allowed also in our workplace. Umm, we are.

✓ So headphones are also not allowed in our workplace.

Word order and redundancy: place 'also' before 'not allowed' or after 'are', but natural order is 'also not allowed'. The trailing fragment 'we are.' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure adverbs are placed naturally (e.g., 'also not allowed').