Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two specific reasons with simple linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid contradictions. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel optimistic. For example, upbeat songs help me concentrate while studying and they energize me before exercise.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer then support it with a specific reason and a correct example. Use correct verb forms and simpler phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it definitely makes me more excited because the rhythm and melody lift my energy. For example, Mariah Carey and Rihanna's upbeat songs make me feel cheerful and motivated.

Sugestão: Answer directly and politely, avoid irrelevant or awkward comparisons, and correct grammar and word choice. Explain briefly why with a specific reason, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I have never taken professional music classes because my parents wanted me to focus on my English studies. As a result, I missed the chance to learn instruments when I was younger.

Sugestão: Start with a clear yes/no and give two specific activities where you listen to music. Use correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid double negatives. Explain briefly whether it helps or distracts and why, using linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to Mandarin and English songs while driving and sometimes while studying. Usually it helps me concentrate, but occasionally it can be distracting if the lyrics are very engaging.

× I always prefer happy music or sad music because happy music always make me feel happy and even optimistic.

✓ I always prefer happy music rather than sad music because happy music always makes me feel happy and even optimistic.

Subject-verb agreement: 'happy music' is singular so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also 'prefer A or B' is awkward here; use 'prefer A rather than B' for contrast. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and choose clearer conjunctions.

× Well, sad music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad, but it just doesn't make feel as happy.

✓ Well, sad music doesn't necessarily make me feel sad, but it just doesn't make me feel as happy.

Pronoun omission: the verb 'make' requires an object ('me'). The original omitted 'me'. Insert 'me' to complete the verb phrase. Also keep parallel structure: 'make me feel'.

× Although I believe that old music are good.

✓ Although I believe that old music is good.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is an uncountable singular noun, so use singular verb 'is' not 'are'. Alternatively say 'old songs are good' to use plural 'are'.

× Yes, without question, that's for sure.

✓ Yes, without question; that's for sure.

Stylistic: original is acceptable but punctuation improves clarity. No major grammar error; keep adverbial phrase 'without question' before the clause or use a semicolon for separation.

× Nothing to the happy tone sounds like those by the artist Mariah Carey.

✓ Nothing in the happy tone sounds like the songs by the artist Mariah Carey.

Preposition and article issue: 'to the happy tone' is incorrect; use 'in the happy tone' or better 'in happy songs'. 'Those' is vague; specify 'the songs' or 'those songs'. The correction clarifies meaning and uses proper preposition and article.

× Rihanna make me feel like flying into the air.

✓ Rihanna makes me feel like I'm flying.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Rihanna' is singular so use 'makes'. Also 'feel like flying into the air' is awkward; use 'feel like I'm flying' for natural expression.

× I was immerse myself in happy music.

✓ I immerse myself in happy music.

Verb form error: 'was immerse' mixes past auxiliary with base form; correct continuous past would be 'was immersing myself' but present fits context: 'I immerse myself' or 'I get immersed in happy music'. Use correct tense and participle: 'immersing' for progressive or 'immersed' for passive.

× I have never taken any professional music classes during my entire lifetime, unlike money Asian kids.

✓ I have never taken any professional music classes in my life, unlike many Asian kids.

Word choice and phrasing: 'during my entire lifetime' is wordy; 'in my life' is natural with present perfect. 'money' is a typo for 'many'. Also avoid broad generalizations. Keep tense: present perfect for life experience.

× That's just a bit of shame.

✓ That's just a bit shameful.

Collocation: 'a bit of shame' is unnatural; use 'a bit shameful' or 'a bit of a shame'. Use correct adjective form 'shameful' or noun phrase 'a bit of a shame'.

× My parents think that I'd better concentrate on studying English.

✓ My parents think that I had better concentrate on studying English.

Modal form: 'I'd better' is contraction for 'I had better', used to give advice; in reported speech about parents' opinion use 'had better' or 'should'. If reporting current advice, 'I should concentrate' is also acceptable. Use full form for clarity.

× They were not keen on learning music.

✓ They were not keen on their children learning music.

Clarity and noun reference: 'They were not keen on learning music' incorrectly implies parents themselves; specify 'their children learning music' or 'having me learn music'. Tense 'were' is acceptable if referring to past attitude; keep consistent.

× Yes, I like to listen to music, both Mandarin and English while I'm doing the driving, and sometimes I listen to the music while I'm studying as well.

✓ Yes, I like to listen to music, both Mandarin and English, while I'm driving, and sometimes I listen to music while I'm studying as well.

Preposition and article use: 'doing the driving' is awkward; say 'driving'. Remove unnecessary definite article before 'music' in the second clause. Add commas for clarity.

× They are not actually always have the distracting effect sometimes.

✓ They do not always have a distracting effect.

Auxiliary and adverb placement: original combines 'are' and 'have' incorrectly. Use 'do not always have' to negate habitual action. Remove redundant adverbs 'actually' and 'sometimes' or place them correctly: 'They do not actually always have a distracting effect' but simpler is better. Use 'a distracting effect' rather than 'the'.