Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (use present tense), remove fillers, make sentences concise, and add one specific reason. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a supporting detail with a linking word. For example, say you prefer happy music, explain how it affects your mood, and give a brief example of when you use it.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and motivated when I study. For example, upbeat pop songs help me stay focused during long revision sessions, so I can study for longer without feeling sleepy.

Sugestão: Use correct grammar and clearer linking words (because, so, therefore). Avoid vague phrases like "follow the reason written." Give one clear cause-effect sequence and limit to 2–3 sentences. Be specific about what "quick tempo" helps you do and give a short example.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music with a quick tempo does make me feel more excited because it increases my energy. For instance, when I clean my room while listening to fast pop music, I work faster and feel more motivated, so I finish tasks more efficiently.

Sugestão: Clarify tense and details: state what instrument, when you learned it, and how long you studied. Remove hesitations and filler words. Use two sentences: one to answer directly, one to add a specific detail (duration, experience or reason for stopping).

Exemplo: Yes, I took piano lessons as a child. My mother enrolled me when I was seven, and I studied piano for about six years before I stopped because of school commitments.

Sugestão: Use present simple tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific effect and a short example of when it helps you concentrate. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect idea and result.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually listen to music when I walk or study because it helps me concentrate. For example, listening to instrumental tracks while doing homework reduces distractions, so I can complete tasks more quickly.

× I preferred happy music because when I study and I heard I, I listen, uh, happy museum will make me feel energetic and motivated to study hard and wound feels uh, sleepy.

✓ I prefer happy music because when I study and I hear it, happy music makes me feel energetic and motivated to study hard, and sad music makes me feel sleepy.

The student used past tense 'preferred' and inconsistent verb forms while describing a general preference. Use present simple for habitual or general statements ('I prefer', 'I hear', 'makes'). Also corrected vocabulary ('museum' -> 'music') and reorganized sentence for clarity.

× So I like to I like happy music more.

✓ So I like happy music more.

Removed redundant words. The phrase 'I like to I like' is repetitive and incorrect. Use a single present simple clause for preference.

× Of course, the happy music with the quickly tone and made me feel excited, or when I do something, I need some energetic and I can follow the tone and follow the reason written, therefore, I can do something more quickly and efficiency.

✓ Of course, happy music with a quick tempo makes me feel excited. When I do something I need energetic music so I can follow the tempo and work more quickly and efficiently.

Fixed adjective/adverb forms: 'quickly' (adverb) vs 'quick'/'quick tempo' (adjective/noun). Changed 'made' to 'makes' for general truth (present simple). Replaced 'reason written' with 'tempo' and corrected 'efficiency' (noun) to 'efficiently' (adverb) to modify the verb.

× Yes, when I was a kid and my mom, uh helped me to apply the meat like piano class in the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid my mom helped me enroll in piano classes.

'Apply the meat like' appears to be incorrect phrasing; 'enroll in' is the correct verb for signing up. Kept past tense 'helped' because this is a past event. Also changed plural 'classes' for natural expression.

× I think it's a talent, talent skill class and I learned it for I, I had learned it for uh 6 or.

✓ I think it's a talent or skill class and I learned it for about six years.

Clarified phrasing 'talent, talent skill' to 'talent or skill'. Use past simple 'learned' for completed action and add 'about' to indicate approximation. Replaced incomplete '6 or' with 'six years'.

× I usually listen to the music when I was walking and or when I was studying.

✓ I usually listen to music when I walk or when I study.

The sentence expresses a habitual action, so use present simple ('I usually listen', 'when I walk', 'when I study') instead of past continuous 'was walking/was studying'.

× It would make me can, it can make me focus on my work tasks or my homework.

✓ It helps me focus on my tasks or my homework.

Removed incorrect modal structure 'would make me can' and simplified to 'helps me focus', which is natural for habitual effect. Use present simple for habitual outcomes.

× Therefore, I can, uh, concentrate in one thing I uh, I need to do.

✓ Therefore, I can concentrate on the one thing I need to do.

Correct preposition is 'concentrate on' not 'concentrate in'. Also streamlined redundant words and maintained present simple for habitual ability.