Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of genres or artists and use linking words. Reduce filler words like “umm” and avoid slight grammar slips (e.g., use “I prefer music depending on my mood” → “I prefer different types of music depending on my mood”).

Exemplo: I prefer different types of music depending on my mood. For example, when I’m happy I listen to upbeat pop or dance tracks with lively rhythms, but when I’m sad I choose mellow acoustic or indie songs that feel more reflective.

Sugestão: Correct word choice and phrasing, and avoid redundancy. Begin with a direct yes/no statement, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Replace incorrect words (e.g., “souls” → “songs”) and remove vague phrases like “absolutely a bit.”

Exemplo: Yes, happy music definitely energizes me because upbeat rhythms and positive lyrics lift my spirits. For instance, I often play lively pop songs while getting ready in the morning or after finishing a project to celebrate and stay motivated.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and fragmented sentences. Give a straightforward answer, then support it with one specific detail about how you developed skills (e.g., practice, family influence) and a brief comment about future plans if relevant. Remove colloquial fillers like “like” and “I just have this.”

Exemplo: No, I have never taken formal music classes. I developed my singing ability by practicing regularly at home and performing at school events, and I might consider lessons in the future to improve technique.

Sugestão: Be more natural and avoid repetitions and fillers. Start with a direct statement, then provide two concise examples of activities and mention specific genres or playlists you use. Replace colloquial phrases like “you know” with clear vocabulary.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play instrumental or lo-fi playlists while working to concentrate, and upbeat pop or R&B when I’m getting ready to go out.

× Umm I prefer music depending on my mood.

✓ Umm, I prefer music that depends on my mood.

The original sentence is awkward because 'depending on my mood' needs a clear subject phrase. Use a relative clause 'that depends on my mood' to link 'music' and the condition. Also add a comma after 'Umm' for natural speech pacing. Suggestion: Use 'that depends on my mood' or 'based on my mood' to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× When I'm in a good mood I tend to listen to a beat and uplifting songs with lively rhythms.

✓ When I'm in a good mood, I tend to listen to upbeat and uplifting songs with lively rhythms.

The phrase 'a beat and uplifting songs' mixes singular 'a beat' with plural 'songs' and is unclear. 'Upbeat' is the correct adjective to describe songs with a strong beat. Add a comma after the introductory clause for correct punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'upbeat and uplifting songs' to correctly describe the music.

× But when I'm feeling down I would choose more melancholic or reflective tracks that match my emotions.

✓ But when I'm feeling down I choose more melancholic or reflective tracks that match my emotions.

Using 'would choose' suggests hypothetical or habitual past; here the speaker describes a present habitual behavior, so simple present 'choose' is appropriate to match the present-tense context. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I choose'.

× Absolutely a bit and a happy music really energizes me.

✓ Absolutely, a bit; happy music really energizes me.

The original has awkward structure and incorrect article 'a' before 'happy music.' 'Music' used in general should not take 'a.' Also punctuation and phrasing needed: separate 'absolutely' and 'a bit' to convey both affirmation and qualification. Suggestion: Say 'Absolutely, a bit; happy music really energizes me.' or 'Absolutely. Happy music really energizes me.' depending on intended emphasis.

× I usually put on lively and uplifting souls when I'm getting ready or after I have accomplished something because the rhythm and positive lyrics put me in a celebratory mood and boost my motivation.

✓ I usually put on lively and uplifting songs when I'm getting ready or after I have accomplished something because the rhythm and positive lyrics put me in a celebratory mood and boost my motivation.

'Souls' is a typo or wrong word choice; the correct noun is 'songs.' The rest of the sentence is grammatically acceptable. Ensure 'songs' is used to refer to musical pieces. Suggestion: Replace 'souls' with 'songs.' Note: Maintain present perfect 'have accomplished' because it links a recent achievement to current behavior.

× Umm, so far I have not.

✓ Umm, so far I have not.

This short reply is acceptable in context but slightly incomplete. Grammatically it's present perfect negative continuing to now. No change needed; keep as is. (Included only to acknowledge correctness.)

× Actually. I've never taken any music classes.

✓ Actually, I've never taken any music classes.

A period improperly splits an interjection 'Actually' from the main clause; combine with a comma to form a single sentence. Suggestion: Use a comma after interjections like 'Actually' when followed by the main clause.

× I just have this.

✓ I just have this natural flair for singing.

The fragment 'I just have this.' is incomplete and unclear in isolation. In context the speaker intends 'I just have this natural flair for singing.' Completing the sentence clarifies meaning and matches present-tense assertion. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; state the complete idea.

× Like, I just have this natural flair for singing.

✓ Like, I just have a natural flair for singing.

'This' is acceptable in casual speech, but 'a natural flair' is more idiomatic when introducing a talent. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'natural flair.' Suggestion: Prefer 'a natural flair' for clearer, more standard phrasing.

× I love singing, and I think I can sing pretty well without having professional instruction.

✓ I love singing, and I think I can sing pretty well without professional instruction.

The phrase 'without having professional instruction' is wordy; 'without professional instruction' is more natural. Pronoun use is fine; only streamline the verb phrase. Suggestion: Use shorter phrase 'without professional instruction.'

× That's what I always do.

✓ That's what I always do.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present habitual context. No correction necessary.

× So even when I'm working or even when I'm getting ready to go out or even when I'm, you know, contemplating about life, I always put on music.

✓ So even when I'm working, getting ready to go out, or, you know, contemplating life, I always put on music.

The verb 'contemplate' takes a direct object without the preposition 'about.' Also the repeated 'even when I'm' is redundant; streamline the list and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'contemplating life' and avoid repetitive phrasing for smoother speech.

× And the type of music will depend on my mood.

✓ And the type of music depends on my mood.

Using 'will depend' suggests future; the speaker describes a general present habitual fact, so simple present 'depends' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use simple present for general truths or habitual facts.