Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more structured: start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then briefly explain with one specific example. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "there are no types of music that are strictly sad or happy"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: I don't strictly prefer sad or happy music; I choose songs that match my mood. For example, if I'm feeling reflective I might pick a mellow song, but when I'm upbeat I select energetic tracks because they match my energy.

Sugestão: Provide a concise direct answer first, then give a specific reason or example. Fix tense and pronoun errors and avoid filler phrases like "you know." Use linking words such as "but" and "because" correctly.

Exemplo: Not always. When I'm sad, upbeat music doesn't always lift my mood because I tend to focus on my feelings. For instance, last month I tried listening to happy songs but still felt down until I talked with a friend.

Sugestão: Open with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give concise supporting details: what you studied, what you gained, and future plans. Remove fillers and correct grammar (e.g., "I recently took vocal lessons" and "I am planning to take guitar or piano lessons").

Exemplo: Yes. I recently took vocal lessons which helped me improve my pitch and breathing technique. In the future, I plan to learn guitar or piano so I can accompany myself when I sing.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid overly long lists or repetition. Use linking words to organize examples (e.g., "for example," "such as"). Correct phrasing ("in my free time" not "anytime I think I have a free time").

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play music when I'm commuting, working on routine tasks at my job, or relaxing at home because it helps me focus and unwind.

× From my perspective there are no type of sad or happy music.

✓ From my perspective there are no types of sad or happy music.

The noun 'type' is countable and must be plural when used after 'no' with plural verb 'are'. Use 'types' to agree with 'are'. Alternatively, use 'there is no type' with singular verb. Improve by matching number between subject and noun: 'there are no types' or 'there is no type'.

× I mean some sad you know beat will have happy lyrics and vibes are So in my opinion I just refer music that makes me enjoyed at that moment.

✓ I mean some sad, you know, beats will have happy lyrics and vibes, so in my opinion I just prefer music that makes me enjoy it at that moment.

Multiple issues: 'beat' should be plural 'beats' to match 'some'; 'vibes are So' is incorrect order and capitalization; 'refer music' is wrong verb choice—use 'prefer'; 'makes me enjoyed' uses past participle instead of base verb + object. Correct by making nouns and verbs agree and using proper verb forms: 'beats', 'so', 'prefer', 'makes me enjoy it'.

× Not sad or happy, just whatever I feel at that moment.

✓ Not necessarily sad or happy, just whatever I feel at that moment.

Fragment lacks connector; adding 'necessarily' clarifies meaning and keeps it a reduced clause acceptable in speech. Maintain sentence completeness by adding a modifier.

× Well, I when I was sad, I tried to listen to upbeat music, but it doesn't really help me to get through of my, you know, my sadness.

✓ Well, when I am sad, I try to listen to upbeat music, but it doesn't really help me get through my, you know, sadness.

Tense inconsistent: speaker describes habitual reaction, so use present simple 'when I am sad, I try'. Remove unnecessary 'of' after 'get through' and redundant 'my'. Also simplify 'my sadness'.

× So I don't think that happy music made me feel more excited.

✓ So I don't think that happy music makes me feel more excited.

Mixing present opinion with past tense 'made' is inconsistent. Use present 'makes' to state a general truth about how happy music affects the speaker.

× It just myself and me feeling excited, feeling, you know, butterfly in the stomach that make me excited.

✓ It's just me feeling excited, feeling, you know, butterflies in my stomach that make me excited.

Wrong pronoun forms 'myself and me'—use 'me' or 'I' correctly; idiom is 'butterflies in my stomach' plural and include 'my' to show possession. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'butterflies ... make'.

× Recently I have taken in vocal class that helped me to improve my singing skills and I really love to sing along with my favorite songs, my favorite artist.

✓ Recently I have taken a vocal class that helped me improve my singing skills, and I really love to sing along with my favorite songs and my favorite artists.

Remove unnecessary 'in' after 'taken'; use article 'a' before 'vocal class'; 'helped me to improve' is acceptable but 'helped me improve' is more natural; use plural 'artists' or connect items with 'and'.

× And in the future I planning, I am planning on, you know, taking on some uh, Greek guitar classes or even some keyboard, piano, some instruments.

✓ And in the future I am planning on taking some guitar classes or even piano lessons.

Missing auxiliary 'am' before 'planning' originally; 'taking on' is unnecessary—use 'taking'; 'Greek guitar' unclear—likely 'guitar' only; 'keyboard, piano, some instruments' is redundant. Simplify and use correct continuous future plan: 'I am planning on taking some guitar classes or piano lessons.'

× I listen to music like all the time, in my pleasure time, when I'm at work or maybe when I'm just on the way to go to school, when I'm anytime I think I have a free time, I don't have to talk with anyone.

✓ I listen to music almost all the time, in my free time, when I'm at work, or when I'm on my way to school; anytime I have free time and don't have to talk with anyone.

Use 'almost all the time' for natural adverbial phrase; 'pleasure time' is incorrect—use 'free time'; 'on the way to go to school' is redundant—use 'on my way to school'; 'anytime I think I have a free time' is awkward—use 'anytime I have free time'. Streamline clauses and correct prepositions and articles.

× I will listen to music, yes.

✓ I listen to music, yes.

Context is habitual present, so present simple 'I listen' fits better than future 'I will listen'. If emphasizing future intention, 'I will listen' is acceptable, but here habitual context makes present simple preferable.