Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: state your preference clearly, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid fillers and grammatical errors. Use a topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail or example. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and motivates me. For example, upbeat songs help me feel energetic when I’m studying or exercising, and their positive lyrics remind me to stay optimistic.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct verb forms and an adjective (excited, not exciting) to describe feelings. Give one brief example or explanation connected by a linking word like "because" or "so".

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. When I hear happy music I feel excited because the rhythm and melody boost my energy. For instance, cheerful songs make me want to dance or sing along.

Sugestão: Provide a clear timeline and details: state when and what kind of classes you took, then add a specific detail about what you learned or how often you practice. Reduce hesitations and use proper tense consistency.

Exemplo: Yes, I took a few music classes at college for about one semester where I learned basic music theory and singing techniques. Since then I still sing regularly for fun and practice a few times a week.

Sugestão: Use simple correct structures and specific examples. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list activities using linking phrases like "for example" and correct verb forms (work, walk, read). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I listen when I work, go for a run, or read a book, because music helps me concentrate and makes routine tasks more enjoyable.

× I do like, uh, happy music, uh, much, uh, because it encourages people and motivation.

✓ I do like happy music a lot because it encourages people and motivates them.

Problems: unnecessary filler words and awkward phrases; 'much' is not natural here; 'encourages people and motivation' mixes a verb phrase with a noun. Use parallel verb forms: 'encourages' and 'motivates' and add 'them' for the object. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'a lot' for emphasis and keep parallel verbs.

× Uh, it always inspired, uh, I encourage people to, uh, for, to face the life.

✓ It always inspires me; it encourages people to face life.

Problems: tense and subject mismatch ('it always inspired' past vs present context); missing object for 'inspires'; extra prepositions 'to, for, to' and article 'the' before 'life' is unnecessary. Use present tense 'inspires' and include the object 'me'; use 'face life' without 'the'.

× Yes, absolutely. The happy music.

✓ Yes, absolutely; happy music does.

Fragment 'The happy music.' is incomplete. Either make it a full sentence or integrate: 'happy music does' answers the question. Avoid unnecessary definite article 'the' unless referring to specific music.

× Every time I I heard hear the happy music, I feel very exciting and I want to, I think I I feel very happy.

✓ Every time I hear happy music, I feel very excited and very happy.

Problems: repeated words ('I I', 'heard hear'); incorrect adjective/adverb: 'feel very exciting' should be 'feel very excited' because 'excited' describes the person's emotion. Simplify and use present simple 'hear' for habitual actions.

× Uh, yes, I took some music classes when I, uh, studying in, uh, in my college, but it's uh, uh, just a little time.

✓ Yes, I took some music classes when I was studying in college, but it was only for a short time.

Problems: missing auxiliary 'was' for past continuous 'was studying'; 'in my college' is more natural as 'in college'; 'just a little time' should be 'only for a short time'.

× I had the lessons, Uh, so my music, uh, but I uh, still always, always sing the songs.

✓ I had some lessons, so I still always sing songs.

Problems: 'the lessons' implies specific lessons—'some lessons' fits general meaning; 'so my music' is unclear and likely unnecessary; 'always sing the songs' is better as 'always sing songs' or 'I still sing songs all the time.' Remove fillers.

× Yes, I often listen music when I was, when I work or doing some other things, for example when I walking, running or when I reading some, when I reading some books and else.

✓ Yes, I often listen to music when I am working or doing other things, for example when I am walking, running, or reading books.

Problems: missing preposition 'to' after 'listen'; tense inconsistency 'when I was' vs 'when I work'—use present progressive 'when I am working' for habitual concurrent activities; verb forms need auxiliary 'am' plus -ing: 'am walking', 'am reading'; remove 'and else' and duplicate phrase. Suggestion: use 'listen to music when I am...' and maintain consistent verb forms.