Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and shifting pronouns (your). State preference and give one brief reason with a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I listen to both sad and happy music, but it depends on my mood. For example, I choose happy songs when I need energy and sad songs when I want to reflect.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer and then give one specific effect using linking words. Reduce hesitation and correct simple word choice (e.g., "boosts" not "boots"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it does. If I like a happy song, I often sing or dance to it, which really boosts my mood and energy.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and a concise reason. Fix article and tense errors ("singing classes", "a short period"). Use a linking word to connect reason. Avoid trailing off; finish the sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I took singing classes for a short time. However, I quit because the travel by bus was time-consuming and inconvenient.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give a specific situation with correct grammar. Remove repetition and finish ideas. Use linking words like "but" or "when" to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Sometimes, but I'm not someone who always needs music. I usually listen when I'm doing housework because it makes the chores more enjoyable.

× I would say that I am, I'm listening to both uh, uh, sad and happy music, but uh, it really depends on uh, uh, your mood and what you want to hear right now. So.

✓ I would say that I listen to both sad and happy music, but it really depends on my mood and what I want to hear right now.

The student used present continuous 'I'm listening' in a general habitual context; the simple present 'I listen' is more appropriate for habits. Also 'your mood' should match the speaker's perspective: use 'my mood'. Suggestions: use simple present for regular habits and ensure pronouns match the subject's perspective.

× Yes, of course. Umm, if I like this music, uh uh, I even can sing or dance uh, it, it boots uh, my mood, umm, excitement and happiness.

✓ Yes, of course. If I like the music, I can even sing or dance; it boosts my mood and happiness.

Modal verb placement: 'I even can' is awkward in English; the normal order is 'I can even'. 'Boots' is a misspelling of 'boosts'. Also 'excitement and happiness' is redundant; 'mood and happiness' or just 'my mood' is enough. Suggestions: place modal verbs before the main verb and use correct verb spelling.

× Yes, I used to have a singing classes, but it was a short period of my lifetime because I didn't like. Going by bus because it took sometimes and I I just quit because.

✓ Yes, I used to take singing classes, but it was a short period in my life because I did not like going by bus; it took a long time, so I quit.

Multiple issues: 'a singing classes' mixes singular article with plural noun — use no article with plural 'singing classes' or use 'a singing class' for singular. 'Used to have' is unnatural for attending classes; use 'used to take'. 'Period of my lifetime' is unnatural; use 'period in my life'. Sentence fragments and repetition ('because... because') need consolidation. Suggestions: use 'take' with classes, correct article use, and combine clauses to avoid fragments.

× Sometimes, but I can't say that I'm a type of person that needs music all the time. I can if if I in this mood that I want to listen something during housework, but usually I like.

✓ Sometimes, but I wouldn't say I'm the kind of person who needs music all the time. I do listen if I'm in the mood and want something on while doing housework, but usually I don't.

Errors: 'I'm a type of person that' is awkward — prefer 'the kind of person who'. 'If if I in this mood that I want to listen something' has missing verbs and wrong structure; use 'if I'm in the mood and want to listen to something'. Ending 'but usually I like' is incomplete; clarify 'I don't' or specify preference. Suggestions: use 'wouldn't say' for cautious statements, 'who' for people clauses, include auxiliary verbs and complete clauses.