Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and complete your final sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because sad songs make me feel low and unmotivated. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my mood and help me concentrate when I'm working.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a direct yes/no, one clear reason, then a concise example. Use linking words such as "because" and avoid awkward phrasing. Keep sentences shorter and clearer to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and melody boost my energy. For example, when a dance track plays at a club, people start dancing and smiling, which creates a lively, joyful atmosphere.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear reason and a short future comment. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to make the response logical and within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I prefer listening to music rather than practicing it, and I don't feel confident about my singing voice. Therefore, I don't plan to take lessons in the near future.

Sugestão: Good content and fluency; tighten the answer by removing fillers (e.g., "umm") and add one specific example of a song type or genre. Use a linking phrase like "for example" and keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while painting, sketching, or driving because it helps me relax and focus. For example, I usually play mellow acoustic songs while sketching to create a calm atmosphere.

× I prefer happy music as sad is not my vibe, it just makes me feel very low and out of my mood.

✓ I prefer happy music because sad music is not my vibe; it just makes me feel very low and out of sorts.

The sentence uses 'out of my mood' which is not idiomatic; the adjective 'sad' needs to describe 'music' consistently. Use 'because' for reason and 'out of sorts' is the correct idiom. Also add 'music' after 'sad' for clarity and use a semicolon to join closely related clauses.

× So happy music is something which makes me feel.

✓ So happy music is something that makes me feel good.

The original sentence is incomplete ('makes me feel' needs an object or complement). Use 'that' as a relative pronoun and add 'good' to complete the idea.

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited as it gives the positive and happy vibes.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it gives positive, happy vibes.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity in spoken English. Remove the definite article 'the' before uncountable plural 'positive, happy vibes' and place adjectives in natural order. Tense is present simple and correct; this fixes word choice and article usage.

× For example if it is a dancing song then it creates a place where everyone just is dancing is happy, excited, enjoying with each other like for example in a club people.

✓ For example, if it's a dance song, it creates an atmosphere where everyone is dancing, happy, excited, and enjoying themselves, like people do in a club.

Original sentence has multiple structural problems: awkward phrasing, wrong word order ('is dancing is happy'), and missing pronouns. Use 'dance song' or 'dance track', contract 'it is' to 'it's', reorder adjectives and verbs, and use 'enjoying themselves' for correct reflexive pronoun and clarity.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes as I'm a kind of person who is really interested to listen to music and not to practice it as I feel I do not have a good singing voice.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes because I'm the kind of person who is really interested in listening to music rather than practicing it, since I feel I do not have a good singing voice.

Use 'the kind of person' and 'interested in listening to' (correct preposition and gerund form). Replace repeated 'as' with 'because' and 'since' for clarity. Maintain present perfect 'haven't taken' for experience up to now.

× So I've never done that and I'm I'm probably not seeing myself in future doing that.

✓ So I've never done that, and I probably don't see myself doing that in the future.

Use present tense 'don't see myself' for current opinion; 'in future' should be 'in the future' and avoid duplicated 'I'm'. Reorder to natural collocation 'see myself doing'.

× Yes, I love listening to music when I'm doing other things and activities umm like if I'm painting, sketching, driving a car.

✓ Yes, I love listening to music when I'm doing other activities, like painting, sketching, or driving.

Remove filler 'umm' and redundant 'doing other things and activities'. Use 'other activities' and a parallel list with 'or'. 'Driving a car' can be shortened to 'driving' for natural speech.

× I feel that time listening music really makes me feel calm and happy and just gives me the positive vibes.

✓ I feel that listening to music at those times really makes me feel calm and happy and gives me positive vibes.

Correct preposition and word order: 'listening to music' not 'listening music', and place 'at those times' to indicate when. Remove 'the' before 'positive vibes' and avoid redundancy 'feel' repeated.