Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, avoid repetition and minor grammatical errors, and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (for example, when you listen to happy music and a particular situation). Watch pronunciation of short words and remove duplicate phrases like “as it as it”.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my energy in the morning, helping me feel motivated to exercise and start work. Therefore, I usually play cheerful music when I am getting ready for the day.

Sugestão: Improve sentence clarity and grammar, avoid vague phrases like “connectively” and “huge wave”, and ensure coherence with linking words. Give a clear cause-and-effect statement and one concrete example of how it affects your behaviour or day.

Exemplo: Yes. Cheerful music usually makes me feel energized and upbeat, so I am more focused when I start work. For instance, listening to an upbeat playlist before studying helps me concentrate and reduces my stress.

Sugestão: Fix grammar, remove fillers, and organize your response: direct answer, brief reason, and a clear plan. Avoid unclear fragments like “I it will.” Mention a specific reason for choosing piano and what you hope to gain from lessons.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken music classes. Although I enjoy listening to music, I haven’t learned to play an instrument. I would like to take piano lessons because the piano is versatile and would help me understand rhythm and music theory.

Sugestão: Remove repetition and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then give a concise reason and one specific example of when you avoid music. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to improve coherence.

Exemplo: No, I usually don't. I find music distracting because it makes me lose focus, so I avoid it when I need to study or do detailed tasks. For example, I turn off music when I'm writing reports to concentrate better.

× I prefer happy music as it as it is the one that impacts me most deeply.

✓ I prefer happy music because it is the one that impacts me most deeply.

The phrase 'as it as it' repeats and misuses the pronoun 'it'. Replace the redundant part with a conjunction 'because' to show reason and keep the single pronoun 'it' referring to 'happy music'. Use a single clear clause: 'because it is...'. Suggestion: remove repetition and use clear connector words (because, since, as) and a single pronoun.

× I connect easily with happy music rather than sad music and besides, it gets me on a good mood which is necessary for me to start my day properly.

✓ I connect more easily with happy music than with sad music, and besides, it puts me in a good mood, which is necessary for me to start my day properly.

Use 'more easily' for comparative adverb and 'than with' to compare connection to two things. 'Gets me on a good mood' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'puts me in a good mood'. Add a comma before the relative clause 'which is necessary...'. Suggestion: use 'more/less + adverb', 'than with' for comparisons, and the idiom 'put in a mood'.

× Yes, of course I connectively with cheerful music, so whenever I'm listening to it I often feel a huge wave of excitement.

✓ Yes, of course I connect with cheerful music, so whenever I'm listening to it I often feel a huge wave of excitement.

The adverb 'connectively' is not correct here. The verb 'connect' is sufficient, often followed by 'with'. Remove the incorrect adverb form. Suggestion: use 'connect with' or 'feel connected to'.

× This often helps us by being in a good mood.

✓ This often helps me to be in a good mood.

The original mixes subjects ('us') and an incorrect phrase 'by being'. The speaker is talking about themselves, so use 'me'. Use 'helps me to be' or 'helps me be' to indicate effect. Suggestion: keep subject consistent and use correct infinitive structure after 'helps'.

× I can approach my day with work with more tranquility and happiness, and generally I think it's necessary for me.

✓ I can approach my workday with more calm and happiness, and generally I think it is necessary for me.

The phrase 'approach my day with work' is confused. Use 'approach my workday' or 'approach my day at work'. 'Tranquility' is formal; 'calm' fits better here. Replace contraction 'it's' with 'it is' is optional but keep tense. Suggestion: choose clear noun phrase like 'workday' or 'day at work' and prefer simpler adjectives.

× No, despite the fact I connect deeply to music and I'm always listening to it, I'm not much of A musical person as seen to actually practice how to do it.

✓ No. Despite the fact that I connect deeply to music and am always listening to it, I'm not much of a musical person as far as actually practicing it goes.

Errors: missing 'that' after 'fact', wrong capitalization 'A', and awkward phrase 'as seen to actually practice how to do it'. Replace with idiomatic 'as far as actually practicing it goes'. Also omit redundant 'I' after 'and'. Suggestion: use 'despite the fact that', lowercase articles, and common expressions like 'as far as ... goes'.

× I would like to try piano classes though.

✓ I would like to try piano classes, though.

Add a comma before 'though' when it appears at the end or as a contrast. Sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: include punctuation for clarity.

× I it will.

✓ I will.

Fragment 'I it will' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I will' to express willingness or future action. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order and omit extraneous words.

× It seems like a lovely instrument and it's generally helpful to keep the beat.

✓ It seems like a lovely instrument, and it's generally helpful for keeping the beat.

Use 'helpful for keeping' instead of 'helpful to keep' for clarity when referring to the instrument's role. Add a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: use 'helpful for + gerund' when describing usefulness for an action.

× No, no, I say find very distracting.

✓ No, no, I find it very distracting.

Missing object 'it' and wrong verb order. Correct form is 'I find it very distracting'. Suggestion: include pronoun object after 'find' when describing something's effect.

× Usually when I'm listening to music, I often get swayed away by it and I end up and I end up not doing the thing I'm supposed to do by consequence.

✓ Usually when I'm listening to music, I often get carried away by it and I end up not doing the things I'm supposed to do as a consequence.

Use idiom 'carried away' instead of 'swayed away'. Remove duplicated phrase 'and I end up'. Use plural 'things' if referring to multiple tasks and 'as a consequence' for result. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use common idioms.

× I prefer listening to music in spaces where I don't have to do anything else.

✓ I prefer listening to music in places where I don't have to do anything else.

'Spaces' is not wrong but 'places' is more natural here. No major grammatical error; this is a stylistic improvement. Suggestion: choose more natural collocations like 'places'.