Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like, you know), correct grammar (e.g., "provokes" not "provoke"), and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep to under five sentences and use linking words for coherence (for example, "because" or "so").

Exemplo: I prefer sad music because it often conveys deep emotions that I can relate to. For example, slow piano pieces help me reflect on personal memories, and as a result I find them more comforting than upbeat songs.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No) then explain briefly. Reduce hesitation markers (uh, like), use precise vocabulary (e.g., "upbeat rhythms"), and add a linking word to connect reason and example (e.g., "because", "for instance").

Exemplo: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because its upbeat rhythms boost my energy. For instance, when I listen to cheerful pop in the morning, I feel more motivated to start my day.

Sugestão: Answer directly, fix grammar and repetition, and give a concise reason or plan. Avoid repeating phrases ("I think it's interesting"). Use linking words ("however", "because") and provide a specific example of what you would like to learn.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to because music helps me relax and reduce stress. For example, I would enjoy learning basic piano techniques to play calming pieces in my free time.

Sugestão: Give a direct affirmative answer, avoid vague words and numbers, correct grammar ("productivity" not "productivities"), and be specific about when and why. Use linking words to connect timing and effect.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or working because it helps me concentrate. For example, I usually play lo-fi or classical playlists during study sessions, which improves my focus and productivity.

× I prefer, for me, I prefer sad music because like, there's something about sad music that like is provoke and emotion and gloomy emotion inside me, a whirlwind, a chaos of emotions that you won't get to experience from the happy ones.

✓ I prefer sad music because there is something about sad music that provokes an emotional, gloomy response inside me, a whirlwind of emotions you do not get from happy music.

Original sentence uses incorrect verb form 'is provoke' where the base verb 'provoke' should be used with -s for third person singular ('provokes') or as a past participle/gerund if rephrased. Also redundant phrases and informal fillers were removed for clarity. Suggestion: use 'provokes' for present simple third person, remove fillers like 'for me' and 'like', and simplify phrases to avoid repetition.

× I think like most people would, uh, feel excited to play happy music, which I do too because I think like they have some upbeat rhythm that helps you feel lively and energized throughout the day.

✓ I think most people would feel excited to play happy music, which I do too, because it has an upbeat rhythm that helps you feel lively and energized throughout the day.

The sentence has inconsistent subject references and uses plural 'they' to refer to 'happy music'. The correct third person singular verb form is 'has' when referring to 'happy music' (it). Also remove filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: replace 'they have' with 'it has' and use 'has' (third person singular) for the music's characteristic.

× So many people, they would use happy music to lighten up their mood and like do their work all day long.

✓ Many people use happy music to lift their mood and work throughout the day.

Using both 'many people' and 'they' is redundant and informal. Also 'lighten up their mood' is less natural than 'lift their mood', and 'do their work all day long' is wordy. Suggestion: remove the redundant pronoun and use concise, natural phrasing.

× I've never taken any music class before, but I think like it's would be interesting to learn one because music is actually an important part of our life.

✓ I've never taken a music class before, but I think it would be interesting to take one because music is actually an important part of our lives.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'music class'. Remove the extra contraction error 'it's would'—use 'it would'. Also 'our life' should be plural 'our lives' when referring generally to people. Suggestion: 'a music class', 'it would', and 'our lives'.

× It's helps us to, uh, relax and like reduce our stress a lot.

✓ It helps us relax and reduce our stress a lot.

Incorrect contraction 'It's' (it is) followed by 'helps' creates ungrammatical 'it is helps'. The correct subject-verb form is 'It helps' (third person singular). Also omit 'to' after 'helps' when followed by another verb, and remove filler 'uh' and 'like'. Suggestion: use 'It helps' and parallel verbs 'relax and reduce'.

× So I think like it's interesting to learn a music class.

✓ So I think it would be interesting to take a music class.

The phrase 'learn a music class' is incorrect: you 'take' or 'attend' a class, not 'learn' a class. Also correct 'it's interesting' to 'it would be interesting' to match hypothetical tone, and include the article 'a' before 'music class'. Suggestion: use 'take a music class' and 'it would be interesting'.

× Yes, well I usually listen to 1 during my study sessions or whenever I wanna catch up on my work.

✓ Yes, I usually listen to music during my study sessions or whenever I want to catch up on my work.

The original uses '1' presumably meaning 'music' and 'wanna' which is informal. Replace '1' with 'music' and 'wanna' with 'want to'. Remove unnecessary 'well' for clarity. Suggestion: use standard words and avoid numeric placeholders and informal contractions.

× Well, I usually like open lofi or maybe classical music during my work time and it helps me with my productivities a lot.

✓ I usually listen to lofi or classical music while I work, and it helps my productivity a lot.

'Open lofi' is unnatural; use 'listen to lofi'. 'Work time' is better as 'while I work'. 'Productivities' is incorrect plural; 'productivity' is an uncountable noun. Suggestion: use 'listen to', 'while I work', and 'productivity'.