Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response clearer, more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence saying you prefer happy music, then give one or two specific reasons (emotional effect and motivation). Avoid technical or incorrect terms (e.g. “adds”, “IT”) and limit to 2–3 sentences with appropriate linking words.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and helps me relax. Also, upbeat songs motivate me to stay focused and tackle difficult tasks, especially when I need an energy boost.

Sugestão: Answer directly and naturally. Begin with a clear yes/no and briefly explain why with one specific example. Use correct collocations (e.g. “makes me feel excited”), avoid repetition and keep to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel excited because upbeat rhythms and positive lyrics lift my mood. For example, I feel more energetic and ready to socialize when I listen to lively pop songs.

Sugestão: Give a concise, well-structured answer with specific details about what you learned. Use correct verbs (e.g. “sing” rather than “play vocals”) and avoid fillers. Mention when, who taught you, and one concrete skill you acquired.

Exemplo: Yes, I took music classes at school as a child with a teacher named Mr. Paramjeet Singh. He taught us basic guitar techniques and singing, and I learned how to accompany songs with simple chords.

Sugestão: Respond directly and naturally: say when you listen to music and why, using specific examples and appropriate phrasing. Avoid awkward expressions like “act as a true beast” and correct grammar (e.g. “listening to music”, “exercise can be boring”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while exercising because upbeat tracks boost my motivation and endurance. For example, energetic electronic or pop songs help me push through a tough run and make the workout more enjoyable.

× I am more inclined to happy music adds as it releases dopamine in our brain which helps our body to destress and also the IT provides motivation for us in order to complete complex tasks.

✓ I am more inclined to happy music because it releases dopamine in our brain, which helps our body destress and also provides us with motivation to complete complex tasks.

Errors: sentence structure and tense/verb issues. 'adds' is incorrect and unnecessary; likely a mistaken word choice. 'the IT provides' is ungrammatical: 'IT' is irrelevant and causes subject-verb confusion. 'helps our body to destress' should be 'helps our body destress' (omit 'to' after 'helps'). Use present simple for general truths. Suggestion: remove extra words, use 'because' to connect reason, keep present simple verbs 'releases', 'helps', 'provides'.

× As mentioned earlier, the happy music released dopamine in our mind which create a sense of excitedness and happiness and we then react correspondingly to it and enjoy the vibe of music.

✓ As mentioned earlier, happy music releases dopamine in our brain, which creates a sense of excitement and happiness, and we then react accordingly and enjoy the vibe of the music.

Errors: tense and subject-verb agreement. 'released' wrongly uses past tense for a general effect; use present simple 'releases'. 'create' should be 'creates' to agree with singular subject 'which' referring to music/dopamine effect. 'excitedness' is nonstandard; use 'excitement'. 'correspondingly' is awkward; 'accordingly' fits better. Also use 'brain' not 'mind' here and include definite article 'the music'.

× During my childhood, I went to a music class which was led by a school teacher, Mr. Paramjeet Singh and he taught us how to play guitar and play vocals accordingly and uh, make symbolism with the tone.

✓ During my childhood, I attended a music class led by my school teacher, Mr. Paramjeet Singh; he taught us how to play the guitar and sing, and how to use tone to express meaning.

Errors: awkward structure and word choices. Use 'attended' rather than 'went to' for classes. 'which was led by a school teacher' is wordy—use 'led by my school teacher'. 'play guitar and play vocals' is incorrect: say 'play the guitar and sing'. 'make symbolism with the tone' is unclear; better 'use tone to express meaning' or 'create symbolic effects with tone'. Remove filler 'uh' and fix punctuation for clarity.

× While doing exercise, I prefer to listen music because it creates a sense of motivation and we act as a true beast in order to perform the difficult task.

✓ While exercising, I prefer to listen to music because it creates a sense of motivation and helps us perform difficult tasks with great effort.

Errors: verb and article use. Use 'exercising' or 'while I exercise' rather than 'doing exercise'. 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to': 'listen to music'. 'we act as a true beast' is informal and awkward; better to say 'helps us perform difficult tasks with great effort' or 'gives us extra energy'. 'the difficult task' should be plural or nonspecific 'difficult tasks'. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× As exercise is a boring to make it excited, the music plays a vital role.

✓ Because exercise can be boring, music plays a vital role in making it more enjoyable.

Errors: article and awkward phrasing. 'As exercise is a boring' is incorrect; 'boring' is an adjective and needs 'boring' with proper structure: 'exercise can be boring' or 'exercise is boring'. 'to make it excited' is ungrammatical; use 'in making it more enjoyable' or 'to make it more exciting'. Recast the sentence for natural English: 'Because exercise can be boring, music plays a vital role in making it more enjoyable.'