Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid hesitations and filler words, and correct article and verb forms (e.g., “the sad song gives me…”).

Exemplo: I prefer sad music because its melodies feel deep and emotional. For example, a sad song can evoke strong memories and help me process feelings, so I often listen to it when I want to reflect.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clear grammar. Say ‘Yes’ or ‘No’ then explain briefly with a reason and an example. Avoid unclear words and false starts; use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms lift my mood. For example, when I listen to lively pop songs I feel energetic and motivated to move or dance.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatically correct response with time reference and one supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood events and avoid repeated hesitations. Link sentences with words like ‘when’ or ‘so’ to improve flow.

Exemplo: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was a child because I wanted to become a singer. Those classes taught me basic techniques and helped me gain confidence performing in front of others.

Sugestão: Start with a clear short answer (Yes/No) then give a concise reason and one example. Use correct grammar (e.g., ‘I am the kind of person who needs to focus on one task’) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: No, I usually don't listen to music while working because I need to concentrate. For instance, when I study or write, I prefer silence to avoid distractions and finish tasks more quickly.

× Maybe I love this sad song because the sad song it give me like a a the sorrow filled and I feel like it's so deep in the melody of the music.

✓ Maybe I love this sad song because it gives me a sense of sorrow, and I feel it deeply in the melody.

The sentence contains redundant and incorrect pronoun use ('the sad song it') and article fragments ('a a the'). Also subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'it' requires 'gives' (third person singular). The phrase 'sorrow filled' is incorrect; use 'a sense of sorrow.' Suggestions: remove redundant nouns, use correct pronoun for the subject, use 'gives' for third-person singular, and simplify to 'I feel it deeply in the melody.'

× Of course, yes, I feel like enthusiastic of UMM when I'm least listen to to Da Chong of music and then I feel like so exciting when alive.

✓ Of course, I feel enthusiastic when I listen to Da Chong's music, and it makes me feel very excited and alive.

Errors include incorrect verb forms and agreement: 'I'm least listen to to' should be 'I listen to.' 'Feel enthusiastic of' should be 'feel enthusiastic when' or 'feel enthusiastic about.' 'I feel like so exciting' uses adjective/adverb incorrectly; use 'it makes me feel very excited.' Use possessive for artist 'Da Chong's music.' Suggestions: use simple present 'I listen to' for habitual actions, correct preposition 'about/when,' and use 'excited' to describe a person rather than 'exciting.'

× Oh, I learned the how to sing a song when I I am, I was a child and then I love to be the singer.

✓ Oh, I learned how to sing when I was a child, and I wanted to be a singer.

Tense inconsistency: 'learned' and 'was' are past, but 'I am' and 'I love to be' mix present. Use past tense for past experience: 'learned' and 'was.' Express desire in the past with 'wanted.' Also remove unnecessary articles: 'the how to sing a song' -> 'how to sing.' Suggestions: keep past tense consistency and simplify phrasing to 'learned how to sing' and 'wanted to be a singer.'

× Is it? It is, uh, it is the another my dream job.

✓ It is another one of my dream jobs.

Awkward word order and incorrect article use: 'the another my dream job' is ungrammatical. Use the phrase 'another one of my dream jobs' to convey an additional dream job. Suggestions: reorder words to 'another one of my dream jobs' and avoid stacking articles and possessives incorrectly.

× Oh of course no, because I cannot like multitasking or something like that because I I'm the person that have to focus one thing and hard work for for it to complete it.

✓ Oh no, of course not, because I can't multitask; I'm the kind of person who has to focus on one thing and work hard to complete it.

Problems include double negatives and incorrect modal/verb forms: 'cannot like multitasking' should be 'can't multitask.' Pronoun and relative clause errors: 'I'm the person that have to' should be 'I'm the kind of person who has to.' Also redundant words ('for for it to complete it'). Suggestions: use contracted negatives ('can't'), use 'multitask' as a verb, use 'who has to focus on one thing,' and remove redundancy.