Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "umm" and vague phrases such as "a bit happy music."

Exemplo: I usually choose music according to my mood. For example, when I feel happy I listen to upbeat pop songs to celebrate, but when I'm sad I prefer slow, mellow tracks because they help me process my emotions.

Sugestão: Correct pronunciation and clarity issues and avoid unclear words; give one clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words to connect idea and example.

Exemplo: Yes, upbeat music definitely energises me because of its fast tempo and catchy rhythm. For instance, when I listen to K-pop hits with strong beats, I feel more motivated and ready to exercise.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence and follow with clear supporting detail; fix grammar (tense, articles) and avoid fillers like "like." Be specific about what you learned and why it mattered.

Exemplo: Yes, I attended compulsory music lessons in primary school. Those classes taught me basic singing and rhythm skills, and I think they were valuable because they improved my confidence and helped me express my emotions.

Sugestão: Good structure and relevant examples; improve word choice and phrasing (avoid "a bit song"), and be slightly more concise. Use linking words for contrast and cause-effect.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I choose calm instrumental tracks to concentrate when I work, but I play upbeat K-pop when exercising because the tempo boosts my energy.

× When I feel delighted, I often go with a bit happy music, like pop music.

✓ When I feel delighted, I often choose slightly happy music, such as pop.

The original uses awkward phrasing 'go with a bit happy music' which is ungrammatical. Use 'choose' for selecting music and 'slightly happy' or 'a bit upbeat' as correct adjective phrase. 'Such as' is better than 'like' for examples here. Use present simple 'choose' to match 'When I feel'.

× However, when I'm feeling down, I would prefer sad music to soften my emotion.

✓ However, when I'm feeling down, I prefer sad music to soften my emotions.

Using 'would prefer' is acceptable but sounds conditional; simple present 'prefer' fits habitual or general preference. Also 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' when speaking generally. Change to present to match 'when I'm feeling'.

× Yes I believe upbeat music is a dopamine booster.

✓ Yes, I believe upbeat music is a dopamine booster.

Main issue is punctuation—missing comma after 'Yes'. Sentence is otherwise acceptable; added comma improves clarity. Kept singular 'a dopamine booster' as a general statement.

× Whenever I listen to pop songs like K pop, Yes K pop has so many updates music it makes me feel ano anerosize and full of energy.

✓ Whenever I listen to pop songs like K-pop, which has so many new releases, it makes me feel energized and full of energy.

There are multiple errors: 'K pop' should be 'K-pop'; 'updates music' is incorrect — use 'new releases' or 'updated music'; 'ano anerosize' is nonsensical and likely intended 'energized'. Use a relative clause 'which has' to refer to K-pop. Also remove redundant 'full of energy' if keeping 'energized' or keep both for emphasis.

× Yes, when I was in primary school music class was compulsory and I personally think it is very important for every child to learn to take the music class because our music really does have like powerful to uplift my emotion.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, music class was compulsory, and I personally think it is very important for every child to take music classes because music really does have the power to uplift emotions.

Several issues: missing comma after introductory clause; 'learn to take the music class' is incorrect—use 'take music classes' or 'learn music'; 'have like powerful' is incorrect—use 'have the power to'; 'my emotion' should be plural 'emotions' or 'one's emotions' for general statement. Kept past tense 'was' for the time clause and present 'is' for general opinion.

× Yes, I listen to different genres of music when I do different things.

✓ Yes, I listen to different genres of music when I do different activities.

Sentence is generally acceptable; changed 'things' to 'activities' for formality and clarity. No major grammatical article error here but improved word choice.

× For example, when I have to work, I tend to choose a calm song to help me stay concentrated.

✓ For example, when I have to work, I tend to choose calm songs to help me stay focused.

'A calm song' can be plural 'calm songs' as a general habit. 'Stay concentrated' is non-idiomatic English; use 'stay focused'.

× However, when I am exercising, I would go with a pop a bit song like K pop song to keep my energy high.

✓ However, when I am exercising, I go for upbeat pop songs, like K-pop, to keep my energy high.

'Would go with' sounds conditional; use present progressive 'am exercising' with habitual present 'I go for' or 'I tend to choose'. 'A pop a bit song' is ungrammatical; use 'upbeat pop songs'. 'K pop song' should be 'K-pop'. Kept present tense to express habitual behavior when exercising.