Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid invented or unclear words and inappropriate phrases. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g. "sad" vs "reflective").

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs during my morning routine to feel energized, and I listen to mellow, reflective songs at night when I want to think quietly.

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate. Begin with a direct answer, then explain briefly with one clear reason and a specific example. Use correct vocabulary ("tempo" not "temple") and avoid hesitations. Keep to max 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Happy music usually has a fast tempo and strong rhythm that increases my energy. For example, I play lively tracks when I exercise because they help me keep a faster pace and feel more motivated.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and a concise reason. Use correct tense and sentence structure. State whether you took classes, then briefly explain why, with one specific detail. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken any music classes, although I wanted to as a child. I was busy with school and my daily routine, so I never had time to attend lessons.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give specific examples and link them logically. Remove fillers and correct small grammar errors ("listen to them"). Aim for two short supporting sentences describing activities and types of music.

Exemplo: Yes, I always listen to music while doing other things. For instance, I play upbeat songs when I do chores to stay motivated, and I listen to relaxing melodies before bed to help me unwind.

× I prefer happy music because it's Abby Tambaru in persuaded lyrics.

✓ I prefer happy music because its upbeat tempo and positive lyrics cheer me up.

The original sentence uses unclear and incorrect words ('Abby Tambaru', 'persuaded') and mixes noun/adjective forms. Replace with 'upbeat tempo' (adjective + noun) and 'positive lyrics' to accurately describe happy music; also use 'its' as the possessive determiner for 'music'.

× Lift my Moodle, help me concentrate while walking.

✓ They lift my mood and help me concentrate while walking.

The original lacks a clear subject and uses 'Moodle' (typo) and comma splice. 'They' refers to songs, 'lift my mood' is correct verb phrase, and use the plural verb 'help' to match plural subject. Also replace 'Moodle' with 'mood'.

× For example, I often play cheerful pop songs during morning routines to feel energized.

✓ For example, I often play cheerful pop songs during my morning routine to feel energized.

Change 'morning routines' to the singular 'my morning routine' for natural phrasing when referring to a habitual activity. The present tense 'play' is correct.

× However, I sometimes listen to sex music when I want to reflect our process emotions.

✓ However, I sometimes listen to sad music when I want to reflect on my emotions and process them.

The original likely has a typo 'sex' instead of 'sad' and incorrect pronoun 'our process emotions'. Use 'sad music' and the verb phrase 'reflect on my emotions and process them' for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× Yes, of course, our happy music has their own beats and their temple, which can stimulate your dopamine.

✓ Yes, of course, happy music has its own beats and tempo, which can stimulate dopamine.

Incorrect pronouns 'our' and 'their' should be removed or replaced; use 'happy music' as a general noun with the singular possessive 'its'. 'Temple' is a typo for 'tempo'. Also 'stimulate dopamine' is more natural than 'your dopamine' in this context.

× So whenever you're doing exercise or or while you're walking or studying, uh, which make you feel relaxed and more comfortable.

✓ So whenever you're exercising, walking, or studying, it makes you feel more relaxed and comfortable.

The original has repetition ('or or'), an unnecessary 'which' clause, and inconsistent verb forms. Use parallel gerunds 'exercising, walking, or studying' and a clear main clause 'it makes you feel...' for correct sentence structure.

× Oh, that was my dream. But no, I've never take any classes since I was a child.

✓ Oh, that was my dream. But no, I've never taken any classes since I was a child.

The present perfect requires the past participle 'taken' after 'have/I've'. 'Take' is the base form and is incorrect here.

× Umm, I'm going to the school, come back to home.

✓ I used to go to school and then come back home.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing 'come back to home'. For describing a habitual past action 'used to' or simple past is appropriate. Use 'come back home' (no 'to') and 'go to school' without 'the' unless a specific school is meant.

× There's like a daily cycle.

✓ There was a daily routine.

The original uses 'there's' (there is) which conflicts with earlier past time references; using past 'there was' or rephrasing to 'I had a daily routine' fits context. 'Like' is filler and can be removed; 'routine' is more natural than 'cycle' here.

× So I've never go there. I've never gone there.

✓ So I never went there. I have never gone there.

The sentence 'I've never go there' is incorrect because after 'have' we need a past participle. 'I've never gone there' is correct; alternatively, for simple past context use 'I never went there.' Provide one consistent tense choice.

× Absolutely. Like always, always I'm, whenever I'm doing chores, I'm starting or I'm, even though I'm about to go to the bed, I listen, uh, relaxing melodies or something.

✓ Absolutely. Whenever I'm doing chores or about to go to bed, I listen to relaxing melodies or similar music.

Original has redundant fillers and incorrect phrases: 'I'm starting' is unclear, 'go to the bed' should be 'go to bed', and 'I listen relaxing' needs the preposition 'to'. Simplify by removing fillers and using correct collocations: 'listen to' and 'go to bed'.

× Uh, I like, I just listen them.

✓ I just listen to them.

After 'listen' the preposition 'to' is required before the object. Remove the filler 'I like' and use 'listen to them' for correct verb-preposition usage.