Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (drop article before ‘music’, use past/present consistently), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music. It boosts my mood and helps me concentrate when I do tests or homework, so I usually play upbeat songs while studying.

Sugestão: Give a direct short answer, correct phrasing (use present simple: ‘it lifts my mood’), and add one brief explanation with a linking word. Avoid unclear expressions like ‘beats my mood.’

Exemplo: Yes, it does. Happy music lifts my mood and makes me more energetic, so I feel motivated to finish tasks faster.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and grammar (e.g., ‘I haven’t taken any music classes’). Give one or two specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., ‘however’ or ‘but’). Avoid repetition and keep sentences clear and limited to 3–4 sentences max.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken any music classes. However, I listen to music regularly because it helps me relax and improves my concentration when I study for tests or prepare for discussions.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give organized examples using linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘also’). Correct grammar (use ‘I always listen’), remove repetitions, and be specific about situations and why you listen to music.

Exemplo: Yes, I always listen to music while doing other things. For example, I play music when I'm cleaning my room, studying, travelling, or driving because it makes these activities more enjoyable and helps me focus.

× I prefer a happy music because it helped to boost my mood and to do my tests and homework on school.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps boost my mood and helps me do my tests and homework at school.

Use of the indefinite article 'a' before uncountable noun 'music' is incorrect (Article errors - ID 22). 'Music' is uncountable here so no article is needed. Verb tense and form: 'helped' should be present 'helps' to match the habitual preference (Present tense issue - ID 6), and the infinitive structure 'to do my tests' is better expressed with 'helps me do'. Preposition 'on school' is incorrect; use 'at school' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). Suggestions: remove 'a' before 'happy music', change 'helped' to 'helps', insert 'me' before 'do', and replace 'on' with 'at'.

× Yes, I'm very excited when I'm listening to the happy music, it beats my mood.

✓ Yes, I feel very excited when I listen to happy music; it lifts my mood.

The continuous form 'I'm listening' is unnecessary for habitual action; use simple present 'I listen' (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'The happy music' uses an incorrect definite article for general reference; use 'happy music' (Article errors - ID 22). 'It beats my mood' is incorrect collocation; use 'lifts my mood' or 'improves my mood' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / word choice - ID 13). Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, remove 'the' before 'happy music', and replace 'beats my mood' with 'lifts my mood'.

× No, I don't take music classes, but I always listening to musics and it helped me to gain my peace, to concentrate more on school.

✓ No, I don't take music classes, but I always listen to music and it helps me find peace and concentrate more on school.

'I don't take' is acceptable but 'I always listening' is grammatically wrong; the correct form is 'I always listen' (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Musics' is nonstandard pluralization; 'music' is uncountable (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'It helped' should be present 'it helps' to match habitual effect (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'Gain my peace' is unnatural; use 'find peace' or 'feel peaceful' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13). Suggestions: change 'always listening' to 'always listen', use 'music' (no plural), and use 'it helps me find peace' and 'concentrate more on school'.

× And it tells me to do my task because when I'm listening my concentration is more focused on that test and on discussion.

✓ And it motivates me to do my tasks because when I listen my concentration is more focused on the test and on discussions.

'It tells me to do my task' is awkward; 'motivates me to do my tasks' is clearer (word choice / sentence structure - ID 26). 'When I'm listening' (present continuous) is unnecessary for habitual or general statements; use simple present 'when I listen' (Verb + -ing form issue - ID 8 and Present tense - ID 6). 'My concentration is more focused on that test and on discussion' has article and count issues: use 'the test' or 'tests' and 'discussions' for plural contexts (Article errors - ID 22; Singular and plural - ID 1). Suggestions: use 'motivate' or 'help' and simple present 'listen', pluralize where appropriate and use definite article 'the' if referring to a specific test.

× Yes, I always listening to music while doing other things.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music while doing other things.

'Always listening' is incorrect without auxiliary; use simple present 'I always listen' for habitual actions (Verb + -ing form - ID 8 and Present tense - ID 6). Suggestions: replace 'always listening' with 'always listen'.

× Example is cleaning in my room.

✓ For example, I clean my room.

The original fragment 'Example is cleaning in my room' is ungrammatical and lacks proper sentence structure (Sentence structure errors - ID 26 and Sentence without a verb - ID 23). Use a full sentence with subject and verb: 'For example, I clean my room.' Suggestions: begin with 'For example,' and use simple present 'I clean'.

× I always listen listen music when I'm studying and when I'm going to the trip.

✓ I always listen to music when I'm studying and when I'm going on a trip.

Duplicate word 'listen listen' is an error (Sentence structure - ID 26). 'Listen music' requires preposition 'to' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'When I'm going to the trip' is incorrect preposition and article usage; use 'going on a trip' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11; Article errors - ID 22). Suggestions: remove duplicate, add 'to' after 'listen', and change to 'going on a trip'.

× When I have when I'm driving my car I always listen to music to.

✓ When I'm driving my car, I always listen to music too.

The phrase has repetition 'When I have when I'm' which is a sentence structure error (Sentence structure errors - ID 26). 'Listen to music to' ends with extra 'to' mistakenly; use 'too' for 'also' (Incorrect use of prepositions / sentence structure - ID 11 and 26). Suggestions: remove the repeated fragment, insert a comma after the introductory clause, and replace the final 'to' with 'too'.