Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. ‘It depends on my mood’), then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘however’. Correct verb forms and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. If I’m in a good mood, I listen to happy music because it lifts my energy and boosts my confidence. However, when I feel down, I prefer sad songs because they help me process my emotions.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid redundant phrases. Use correct subject-verb agreement and choose precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘energised’ instead of ‘give me strength’ twice). Limit to up to 4 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. Happy music makes me feel energised, so I can concentrate better and work more efficiently. For example, upbeat songs help me stay motivated during exercise or when I’m studying.

Sugestão: State your position clearly and give a brief reason. Avoid repeating the same idea. If you intend to discuss future plans, use correct future forms and link your reasons with words like ‘because’ or ‘so’. Consider adding a short contrast if relevant.

Exemplo: No, I haven’t taken any music classes yet because I’m not confident about my singing voice. Therefore, I don’t plan to join classes in the near future, although I might learn an instrument instead.

Sugestão: Use consistent tenses and give specific examples. Begin with a topic sentence (‘Yes, I often listen to music while…’), then add two concise examples with linking words such as ‘for example’ or ‘for instance’. Avoid vague expressions like ‘reduces time very much.’

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play music when I’m working because it helps me concentrate, and I also listen to the radio while driving to make long journeys feel shorter.

× So it's completely depends upon my mood.

✓ So it completely depends on my mood.

The sentence uses present simple to describe a general truth; 'depends' should follow subject 'it' without contraction 'it's' which is 'it is' causing conflict with 'depends'. Also use preposition 'on' not 'upon' here for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'It depends on my mood.'

× If I'm in good mood and I would like to listen to happy music because because it not only improve my confidence but it also have some energetic.

✓ If I'm in a good mood I like to listen to happy music because it not only improves my confidence but also gives me energy.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'good mood' (article error ID 22), use of conditional 'would like' is unnecessary in a general statement (present tense should be used), subject-verb agreement: 'it ... improves' and 'it ... gives' require third person singular verbs. 'Have some energetic' is ungrammatical; use noun 'energy'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct verbs and articles.

× But if I am feeling very low and feeling depressed, I would like to hear sad music.

✓ But if I am feeling very low or depressed, I like to listen to sad music.

Use present simple 'I like' for habitual preference rather than 'would like' when describing what one typically does in that state. Also combine redundant 'feeling' and use 'or' for alternatives. Maintain consistent tense.

× Yes, absolutely. Happy music give me much more strength and I can do things very in a better way and it also give me many energetic and also improve my strength.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Happy music gives me much more strength, helps me do things in a better way, and gives me energy and confidence.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Happy music' is third person singular, so verbs must be 'gives'. Awkward phrases 'many energetic' and 'improve my strength' are incorrect; use nouns 'energy' and 'confidence' and verbs 'gives' and 'helps'. Remove unnecessary words and fix word order.

× Not yet because I'm not good at singing, but I think I should not prefer singing because I think I have a very bad voice.

✓ Not yet, because I'm not good at singing. I don't prefer singing because I think I have a very bad voice.

Use simple negative 'I don't prefer' instead of 'I should not prefer' which misuses modal 'should' to express preference. Also split run-on sentence into two. Maintain present simple for current preference.

× So that's why I will not join any music classes in future.

✓ So that's why I will not join any music classes in the future.

Add definite article 'the' before 'future'. 'Will not join' is acceptable for future decision; keep as is but include article for correctness.

× Yes, when I was free or I am at working I usually prefer music because I can do my work very smoothly as when I am driving I would listen to music because it reduces time very much.

✓ Yes, when I am free or at work I usually listen to music because I can do my work more smoothly. When I am driving, I listen to music because it makes the time pass more quickly.

Inconsistent tenses: switch to present simple 'I usually listen' for habitual actions. 'Was free' should be 'am free'. 'At working' is incorrect; use 'at work'. 'Would listen' is wrong for habitual action; use 'I listen'. 'Reduces time very much' is unnatural; use 'makes the time pass more quickly'. Suggest using consistent present simple for routines and more natural collocations.