Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., 'after a long day at work', 'helps my emotions or brain function better') and avoid vague statements like 'brains functioning'. Use a linking phrase to connect reasons.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music. It helps me unwind after a long day at work and lifts my mood, for example by making me feel more energetic when I’m cooking or exercising.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, then explain with a clear, grammatical reason. Avoid mixed tense and awkward phrasing like 'as was my emotional health better.' Use a linking word such as 'because' and provide a brief example of the effect.

Exemplo: Yes, it does. Happy music excites me because the upbeat rhythm increases my energy, and at the same time it reduces stress — for instance, I feel calmer and more focused after listening for 10–15 minutes.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give clear, specific details in correct grammar. Use past simple consistently for past events and add one linking word to show sequence or contrast. Avoid redundant phrases like 'very enjoyed and loved so much.'

Exemplo: Yes, I took a classical music class when I was a child and really enjoyed learning the piano. However, I stopped when I started high school because I had less free time and more homework.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Use present simple for habitual actions, correct countable/uncountable nouns ('music' not 'musics'), and simplify sentences. Use linking words like 'but' to contrast and give a short example of situations.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while doing simple tasks. For example, I play upbeat playlists when I do housework, but I avoid music at work when I need to concentrate.

× I love listening to happy music because it helps me reduce my stress after long day works and also I think listening to music will help your emotional or brains functioning better.

✓ I love listening to happy music because it helps me reduce my stress after long days of work and I also think listening to music helps your emotional and brain functioning.

Errors: 'long day works' is incorrect quantifier and noun form; correct phrase is 'long days of work'. 'Will help' changed to 'helps' to match general truth (present tense). 'your emotional or brains functioning' mixes pronouns and plural noun; correct is 'your emotional and brain functioning' or 'emotional and brain functioning'. Suggestion: use 'long days of work' and keep consistent pronoun and singular noun forms; use present simple for habitual/general effects.

× Yes it does. Happy music would make me feel excited and also at the same time make me less stressed, as was my emotional health better.

✓ Yes, it does. Happy music makes me feel excited and at the same time makes me less stressed, and improves my emotional health.

Errors: 'would make' is unnecessary modal here; use present simple 'makes' for habitual effect. Subject-verb agreement: 'make me less stressed' should be 'makes me less stressed' because subject 'Happy music' is singular. 'as was my emotional health better' is ungrammatical; correct to 'and improves my emotional health'. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.

× Yes, I did. When I was a kid I did take a classical music class which I was very enjoyed and loved so much.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a kid I took a classical music class which I enjoyed and loved very much.

Errors: 'did take' is unnecessary emphatic past; simple past 'took' is natural. 'which I was very enjoyed' mixes passive/perfect forms incorrectly; correct is 'which I enjoyed'. Adverb placement: 'very much' should follow the verb phrase. Suggestion: use simple past for past events and place adverbs like 'very much' after the verb.

× However, I didn't have time when I was getting into high school so I quit that.

✓ However, I didn't have time when I entered high school, so I quit.

Errors: 'was getting into high school' is awkward; use simple past 'entered high school'. 'Quit that' is informal; simply 'quit' or 'quit the class' is clearer. Suggestion: use simple past for past transitions and be concise: 'entered high school' and 'quit'.

× Yes I do actually. It depends on situations.

✓ Yes, I do actually. It depends on the situation.

'depends on situations' is non-idiomatic; use singular 'the situation' or plural with an article 'on the situations'. Suggestion: use 'depends on the situation' for general statements.

× If I wanted to do something that required less concentrations, like housework, I would love to listen to musics while doing the tasks.

✓ If I want to do something that requires less concentration, like housework, I love to listen to music while doing the tasks.

Errors: tense mismatch: use present 'want' and 'requires' for general habit. 'less concentrations' should be 'less concentration' (uncountable). 'musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is uncountable. 'I would love to' implies conditional; for habitual use 'I love to' or 'I like listening to'. Suggestion: use correct uncountable nouns and consistent tense for habits.

× However, if at work I would wouldn't.

✓ However, at work I wouldn't.

Errors: 'would wouldn't' is a contradiction and has an extra auxiliary. Remove the extra 'would'. Also place adverbial phrase 'at work' before subject for clarity. Suggestion: keep the negative auxiliary once: 'I wouldn't' or more complete 'I wouldn't listen to music at work.'