Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with grammar, word choice and clarity. Say “happy music” (uncountable), avoid repetition and irrelevant references (e.g., “horror music” contradicts preference). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct verb forms.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it helps lift my mood when I feel anxious. For example, I often listen to upbeat pop songs by Taylor Swift because their rhythms and lyrics make me feel more positive.

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar (e.g., “happy music” and “it boosts my emotions”) and link ideas logically: state the answer, explain why, and give a brief example. Reduce repetition of the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, it does. Happy music usually boosts my energy and lifts my mood because my job is quite stressful. For instance, listening to upbeat songs during my commute helps me feel more focused and upbeat for the day.

Sugestão: Good structure: direct answer and supporting detail. Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), correct nouns (“violin class” or “violin lessons”), and make sentences smoother. Keep it concise and add a brief reason for stopping.

Exemplo: Yes. I took violin lessons when I was in primary school and I enjoyed them. I stopped when I started high school because I became too busy with my studies.

Sugestão: Organize the answer more clearly: state the general rule, then give specific examples. Correct phrasing (e.g., “high level of concentration,” “in those situations”). Avoid fillers and split into complete sentences with linking words like “however” or “for example.”

Exemplo: It depends. If a task requires a high level of concentration, such as studying, I usually don't listen to music. However, for routine tasks like housework or commuting, I prefer to listen to music because it makes those activities more enjoyable.

× I would say I prefer happy musics because it's hard to beat up my bad moods or anxiety.

✓ I would say I prefer happy music because it's hard to shake off my bad moods or anxiety.

'Musics' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural form; use 'music'. Also 'beat up my bad moods' is unnatural; 'shake off' or 'lift' is appropriate. Suggestion: treat 'music' as uncountable and choose idiomatic phrasal verbs.

× For instance, I love to listen to music of Taylor Swift I I think she's incredible and horror music's all are very enjoyable to listen to.

✓ For instance, I love to listen to Taylor Swift's music; I think she's incredible, and horror music is also very enjoyable to listen to.

Use possessive form 'Taylor Swift's music' rather than 'music of Taylor Swift'. Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Horror music's all are' is incorrect: use 'horror music is also' because 'music' is uncountable. Also add punctuation to separate ideas.

× Also the charm if you feel excited when listening to happy musics.

✓ Also, there's a charm when you feel excited listening to happy music.

Again, 'musics' is wrong; use uncountable 'music'. The original sentence is fragmented; add 'there's' to form a complete sentence and use 'when you feel excited listening to...' for clarity.

× And apart from that, I love listening to happy musics, which is boost my emotions because umm, my job's quite stressed.

✓ And apart from that, I love listening to happy music, which boosts my emotions because my job is quite stressful.

'Musics' should be 'music' (uncountable). 'Which is boost my emotions' incorrectly mixes forms; correct relative clause uses 'which boosts my emotions'. 'My job's quite stressed' incorrectly uses adjective 'stressed' for a job; use 'stressful'.

× When I was a kid in primary school I used to take violin class.

✓ When I was a kid in primary school I used to take violin lessons.

'Violin class' is acceptable but 'violin lessons' is more natural in English. 'Used to take' is correct past habit. Change 'class' to plural 'lessons' to reflect repeated sessions.

× but unfortunately when I entered to high school I don't have a chance because I was too busy studying.

✓ but unfortunately when I entered high school I didn't have the chance because I was too busy studying.

'Entered to high school' is wrong; correct is 'entered high school' or 'went to high school'. Tense inconsistency: events in past should use past tense 'didn't have' not 'don't have'. Add 'the' before 'chance' for natural phrasing.

× I would say it depends on situations.

✓ I would say it depends on the situation.

Plural 'situations' is not wrong but 'depends on the situation' is a more natural fixed expression here. Alternatively, 'depends on the situation' matches singular reference to context.

× If I don't need high level of concentrations like working umm.

✓ If I don't need a high level of concentration, like when working, ...

'High level of concentrations' is incorrect: use 'a high level of concentration' (singular, uncountable 'concentration'). Add 'when' for clarity and comma before continuation.

× In that situations I don't normally listen to music.

✓ In those situations, I don't normally listen to music.

Use 'those' with plural 'situations' ('that' + plural is incorrect). Add a comma after the introductory phrase.

× But let's say if doing housework I prefer to listen to music.

✓ But let's say when I'm doing housework, I prefer to listen to music.

'If doing housework' lacks a subject; use 'when I'm doing housework' or 'if I am doing housework'. Add comma after the clause. Maintain present continuous for the activity.