Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy (e.g., "most of the sad music that I have ever heard is got good melody" → "most sad songs I’ve heard have beautiful melodies"). Use a linking phrase if adding a second point.

Exemplo: I prefer sad music. Most sad songs I’ve heard have beautiful melodies and emotional lyrics, so they often give me chills and help me reflect on my feelings.

Sugestão: Make the response more fluent and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then one specific example with correct grammar and linking words (e.g., "for example" or "so"). Keep it to two or three sentences max.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music often makes me feel more excited. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs while exercising, I feel more energetic and I tend to work out longer.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and structure: give a direct answer, then briefly explain with relevant, specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., "I haven't" → "I haven’t taken any"; "I could self learning guitar" → "I taught myself guitar"). Avoid irrelevant comparisons unless they add meaning.

Exemplo: No, I haven’t taken any formal music classes, but I wish I could. I taught myself to play the guitar at home because lessons were expensive, and I practice for about 30 minutes every day to improve.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Use a topic sentence and one or two specific activities with linking words. Replace unclear phrases like "open music" with "play music" and correct verb agreement.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while working or drawing, and sometimes in the shower. Playing music helps me relax and unwind after a tiring day.

× I'd prefer sad music because most of the sad music that I have ever heard is got good melody and it give me chills.

✓ I'd prefer sad music because most of the sad music that I have ever heard has a good melody and it gives me chills.

The original sentence uses 'is got' which is incorrect; the correct form is the present perfect 'has' for possession (verb in past participle not needed here) and subject-verb agreement requires 'gives' for 'it'. Use 'has a good melody' to indicate possession and 'gives' because the subject 'it' (the music) is singular. Suggested improvement: replace 'is got' with 'has' and change 'give' to 'gives'.

× Yes, some of the happy music will because some happy music will motivate me for doing something like when exercising, if I listen to a happy music, I will be more energetic and wants to work out for more.

✓ Yes, some happy music will, because some happy songs motivate me to do things like exercising; if I listen to happy music, I will be more energetic and want to work out longer.

Overuse and incorrect forms of 'will' and modal constructions make the sentence awkward. 'Will' is fine to express future tendency but should not be repeated unnecessarily. 'Motivate me for doing something' is incorrect; use 'motivate me to do something'. 'A happy music' is wrong because 'music' is uncountable; use 'happy music' or 'happy songs'. 'Wants' is wrong because the subject is 'I' so use 'want'. Suggested improvement: remove the extra 'will', use 'motivate me to do', use 'happy songs' or 'happy music', and use 'want' for subject-verb agreement.

× I haven't but I wish I could because my home is relatively middle class compared to my other friends houses but I could self learning guitar and I'm trying to do my best.

✓ I haven't, but I wish I could, because my home is relatively middle-class compared to my other friends' houses; but I can teach myself guitar and I'm trying to do my best.

Several article and form errors: 'middle class' as a compound adjective should be hyphenated 'middle-class'. 'My other friends houses' needs possessive apostrophe 'friends'' to indicate houses belonging to friends. 'I could self learning guitar' is ungrammatical; use 'I can teach myself guitar' or 'I can learn guitar by myself'. 'Could' is inappropriate if you mean ability now; 'can' fits better. Also punctuation and sentence structure improved. Suggested improvement: use possessive apostrophe, hyphenate 'middle-class', and use 'teach myself' or 'learn by myself' instead of 'self learning'.

× Yes I do and I usually listen to music while working or drawing, sometimes even when showering. I like to open music and it make me feel relaxed and relieved from a day of exhaustion.

✓ Yes, I do, and I usually listen to music while working or drawing, sometimes even when showering. I like to play music and it makes me feel relaxed and relieved after a day of exhaustion.

'Open music' is not a correct collocation; use 'play music'. 'It make' is wrong for subject-verb agreement; use 'it makes'. 'Relieved from a day of exhaustion' is awkward; use 'relieved after a day of exhaustion' or simply 'relieved after a tiring day'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggested improvement: use correct collocations like 'play music', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate preposition 'after' for time context.