Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect collocations (e.g., “I'm thrilled and I prefer” is awkward). Also correct small grammar issues: say “it depends on my mood,” and use smoother connectors like “however” or “otherwise.”

Exemplo: I usually choose music based on my mood. For example, when I want to feel energetic I listen to upbeat, happy songs with fast rhythms; however, when I need to relax and be alone I prefer slow, sad ballads that help me unwind.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer then give one or two clear reasons with correct phrases. Fix grammar (e.g., “it gets me moving,” “I really use it when I need a mood boost”). Avoid vague phrases like “a kind of positivity.” Use vivid but accurate vocabulary like “energised” or “motivated.”

Exemplo: Yes, definitely — happy music energises me and improves my mood. For instance, upbeat songs with strong beats get me moving and more motivated to exercise or work, so I often play them when I need a quick boost.

× It gets me move on.

✓ It helps me move on.

The original uses 'gets me move on', which is ungrammatical. After 'get' as causative you'd say 'to' or a past participle (e.g., 'gets me to move on' or 'helps me move on'). More natural here is 'helps me move on'. Suggestion: use 'helps me move on' or 'gets me to move on' depending on emphasis.

× It gives a kind of positivity in my mood which I really whenever I need it, I just grasp it and go and use it.

✓ It gives a kind of positivity to my mood that I can really grasp and use whenever I need it.

Multiple issues: 'positivity in my mood' is better as 'positivity to my mood' (preposition choice). The relative clause was ungrammatical and word order flawed. Also 'which I really whenever I need it' is incorrect placement of 'whenever I need it'. Rewriting clarifies meaning and fixes preposition use and word order. Suggestion: place 'whenever I need it' at the end and use 'that I can grasp and use'.

× If I want to be excited and I'm thrilled and I prefer happy music.

✓ If I want to be excited and thrilled, I prefer happy music.

The original repeats similar ideas and uses conjunctions awkwardly ('If I want to be excited and I'm thrilled and I prefer'). This is a sentence structure issue. Combine the ideas succinctly: 'If I want to be excited and thrilled, I prefer happy music.' Suggestion: remove redundant 'I' and streamline the clause.

× But if sometimes I really want to be alone and I just want to sit and relax, then I prefer sad.

✓ But sometimes, if I really want to be alone and just sit and relax, I prefer sad music.

Word order and article missing: 'But if sometimes I really' is awkward. Also 'prefer sad' lacks the noun 'music'. This involves present participle placement and sentence flow. Rephrase to 'But sometimes, if I really want to be alone and just sit and relax, I prefer sad music.' Suggestion: include the noun and place 'sometimes' earlier for natural flow.

× Yes, happy music always makes me more thrilled.

✓ Yes, happy music always makes me feel more thrilled.

'Makes me more thrilled' is understandable but it's more natural to say 'makes me feel more thrilled' to show the effect. This clarifies the verb's object and complements the causative structure. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' when describing emotional effects.