Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or lack of preference), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., ‘all genres’, ‘depending on how I feel’) and redundancy.

Exemplo: I don’t have a fixed preference; I enjoy both sad and happy music. For example, I listen to upbeat pop when I need energy, but I choose mellow acoustic songs when I want to relax or think. Because my mood changes, I pick different genres accordingly.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then add a concise reason and specific example. Use linking words (e.g., ‘but’, ‘however’, ‘for example’) and correct phrasing (e.g., ‘there are times when I need’). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music usually lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. However, there are times when I prefer solemn music to reflect or calm down, for example after a busy day when I want to think quietly.

× I listen to all genre of music and being sad depending on how I am feeling that particular time.

✓ I listen to all genres of music and feel sad depending on how I am feeling at that particular time.

The noun 'genre' should be plural 'genres' to match 'all'. 'Being sad' is an incorrect verb form here; use simple present 'feel sad' to match habitual or state meaning. Also 'that particular time' needs the preposition 'at' for correct temporal expression. Suggestion: use 'I listen to all genres of music and feel sad depending on how I am feeling at that particular time.'

× ...and being sad depending on how I am feeling that particular time.

✓ ...and feel sad depending on how I am feeling at that particular time.

The gerund 'being' is not appropriate after 'and' in this clause; a finite verb 'feel' fits the sentence structure and maintains parallelism with 'I listen'. Also include 'at' before 'that particular time' for correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: maintain parallel verbs: 'I listen... and feel...'.

× Happy music does make me feel better, makes me feel great though there are times where when I need to listen to solemn music just to reflect on different things.

✓ Happy music does make me feel better and makes me feel great, though there are times when I need to listen to solemn music just to reflect on different things.

The original sentence lacks a conjunction between clauses and contains the redundant 'where when'. Insert 'and' to connect parallel verbs and remove 'where' so 'times when' is correct. Also add a comma before 'though' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'and' to link similar actions and 'times when' for temporal clauses.