Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb agreement and choose precise phrases (e.g. “depends on the situation,” “relieve stress,” “tidy” is unclear). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually prefer happy music because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, upbeat songs lift my mood and distract me from work stress, so I can enjoy simple moments at home.

Sugestão: Use a direct topic sentence and one specific supporting detail with correct grammar. Replace vague words like “relaxable” with “relaxed.” Use a linking word (e.g. “because” or “so”) to connect cause and effect. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because energetic rhythms boost my energy levels. As a result, I feel less stressed after work and more relaxed and comfortable.

× It depend upon the situation that I prefer sad or happy music but to be honest I love to listen happy music because it helps me to relax and enjoy the every moment to keep away stress from the work and the tidy.

✓ It depends on the situation whether I prefer sad or happy music, but to be honest I love to listen to happy music because it helps me relax and enjoy every moment, keeping stress from work and tidiness away.

The original sentence has several subject-verb agreement and verb form issues. 'It depend' should be 'It depends' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'depends on' rather than 'depend upon' here for natural collocation. Use 'whether' to introduce the choice 'sad or happy music'. 'Listen happy music' is missing the preposition 'to' (verb+preposition). 'Helps me to relax' is acceptable but more natural as 'helps me relax' (infinitive vs bare infinitive usage). 'Enjoy the every moment' is incorrect word order and article use; correct is 'enjoy every moment'. The phrase 'to keep away stress from the work and the tidy' is ungrammatical and unclear: 'keeping stress from work and tidiness away' clarifies intent, but better would be 'helping me keep work-related stress away' or similar. Suggested improvements: ensure subject and verb agree ('depends'), use correct prepositions ('depends on', 'listen to'), use 'whether' for choices, remove unnecessary articles ('every moment' not 'the every moment'), and simplify the final phrase to a clear noun phrase ('work-related stress').

× Of course, happy music helps me to feel more excited, which also relieve my stress from the whole day after the work and I feel very relaxable and comfortable.

✓ Of course, happy music helps me feel more excited, which also relieves the stress of the whole day after work, and I feel very relaxed and comfortable.

There are multiple issues: 'helps me to feel' can be simplified to 'helps me feel' (bare infinitive after 'help'). 'Which also relieve' is incorrect because the relative pronoun refers to 'happy music' or 'helping', and the verb must agree: 'relieves' (third person singular). 'Relieve my stress from the whole day after the work' is awkward and unidiomatic; use 'relieves the stress of the whole day after work' or 'relieves my stress after a long day at work'. 'Relaxable' is not the correct adjective; use 'relaxed'. Suggestions: use correct verb agreement ('relieves'), choose natural collocations ('after work', 'relieves stress'), and use correct adjective 'relaxed'.