Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (remove duplicate words, use correct verb forms) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “uplifting,” “cheerful,” “relaxed”). Aim for 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy. For example, upbeat songs help me feel more relaxed and motivated after a long day. Therefore I usually choose cheerful music when I want to feel better.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with coherent linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove filler phrases) and be specific about how the music affects you (energy, tempo, memories). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating words.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because its fast tempo and cheerful melody give me energy. For instance, when I listen to an upbeat song I imagine the lively performance and start moving along, which boosts my mood and motivation.

× I definitely prefer happy music because if if I listen to some music I feel depression and wanted to cry right after it.

✓ I definitely prefer happy music because if I listen to some music I feel depressed and want to cry right after it.

The sentence uses inconsistent verb forms and adjective form. 'Feel depression' is incorrect; use the adjective 'feel depressed'. 'Wanted to cry' mixes past tense with present conditional; use present 'want to cry' to match 'if I listen'. Also remove the duplicated 'if'. Maintain present tense for general statements and conditional 'if' clauses.

× It makes me feel refreshing and relaxation but also I gave.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed and relaxed, and it also cheers me up.

'Refreshing' and 'relaxation' are mismatched forms: use adjectives 'refreshed' and 'relaxed' to describe feelings. 'I gave' is not meaningful here; likely intended 'it gives me' or an idiom like 'cheers me up'. The corrected sentence uses appropriate adjectives and a clear phrasal verb.

× Yes, definitely happy music make me feel excited because when I'm, for example, when I listen to happy music, I gain energy from that and because of the real relax, but also I imagine the performance of the happy music music video.

✓ Yes, definitely happy music makes me feel excited because, for example, when I listen to happy music, I gain energy from it and feel really relaxed, and I also imagine the performance in the music video.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'happy music' is singular so use 'makes'. Remove redundant phrases and fix 'real relax' to 'really relaxed' (adverb + adjective). 'From that' is better as 'from it'. 'Performance of the happy music music video' is awkward; use 'performance in the music video'. Also remove duplicated 'music'.