Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid awkward phrases and grammar mistakes (e.g. "Maximum people", "his or her"). Use precise vocabulary and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music. It lifts my mood and helps me feel energetic, especially when I’m exercising or working. For example, upbeat pop songs make me want to move and help me stay positive during a busy day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid contradicting yourself. Begin with a clear yes/no or qualified answer, then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, when, for example). Fix grammar ("a happy music" → "happy music"; "'cause" → "because") and avoid vague or unclear expressions like "a great symbol of one kind of romanticism."

Exemplo: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because it has a fast rhythm and cheerful melodies that energize me. For instance, when I listen to upbeat songs from my childhood, I remember fun times and feel motivated to be active.

× Yes, I prefer happy music because happy music is a great source of pleasure.

✓ Yes, I prefer happy music because happy music is a great source of pleasure.

No change needed; sentence is grammatical. The use of the definite or zero article before 'happy music' is acceptable here as a general category.

× Maximum people are involved in this type of music for his or her mental pleasure.

✓ Most people are involved in this type of music for their mental pleasure.

'Maximum people' is unidiomatic; use 'most people'. Also pronoun 'his or her' is awkward and can be replaced by the gender-neutral plural pronoun 'their' to agree with the plural subject. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent plural reference.

× No, yes, a happy music make me some excitement 'cause when I hear the this type of music I feel good and I can recall my past memories and present good feelings.

✓ No, no. Happy music makes me excited because when I hear this type of music I feel good and can recall past memories and pleasant feelings.

Multiple errors: 'a happy music' is incorrect — 'music' is uncountable so no indefinite article; use 'happy music' or 'a happy song' if countable. 'Make me some excitement' is ungrammatical; use 'makes me excited' or 'gives me excitement'. Use third-person singular verb 'makes' to agree with singular/uncountable subject 'music'. Remove the extra article 'the' before 'this type of music'. 'Past memories' is redundant (memories are inherently past) but acceptable; 'present good feelings' should be 'pleasant feelings' to be natural. Also replace informal ''cause' with 'because' and correct the initial 'No, yes' confusion.

× Really it's a great symbol of one kind of romanticism to feel someone.

✓ Really, it is a strong symbol of a kind of romanticism that makes you feel emotional about someone.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Symbol of one kind of romanticism to feel someone' mixes noun phrases and an infinitive incorrectly. Recast the idea: use 'a kind of romanticism' and follow with a clause 'that makes you feel emotional about someone' or 'that makes you feel love for someone'. This produces correct sentence structure and clear meaning.