Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what makes him good, an example of mentorship). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'he is' instead of 'he's a he's').

Exemplo: Yes. My favorite teacher is Masood, who teaches physics at my college. He is highly professional and explains difficult concepts clearly, which helped me improve my exam scores. In addition, he mentors me personally and advises me on career choices, so I enjoy spending time in his class.

Sugestão: Use polite, formal language and avoid contractions like 'wanna'. Give a clearer reason and expand slightly with linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'so') and one brief example to support your point. Keep sentences grammatical and natural.

Exemplo: No, I do not want to be a teacher in the future because I find it difficult to explain ideas clearly to others. Also, I am not very interested in the teaching profession, so I prefer a career that involves technical work rather than classroom instruction.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words ('uh') and repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples of how he helped you (which activities, which topics). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to organize details.

Exemplo: Yes, I still remember one teacher from my past who acted as a mentor. For example, he encouraged me to join the debate club and taught me time-management skills, which improved both my confidence and study habits. He also explained life skills beyond academics, so his guidance was very valuable.

Sugestão: Correct tense and be more specific. Begin directly and provide a short reason or one supporting detail. Avoid vague phrasing like 'I think' if you can state a clearer fact.

Exemplo: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because we lost contact after I changed schools. However, I performed well in primary school, which suggests they were effective teachers who prepared me well.

Sugestão: Clarify and expand the abbreviations and use parallel grammar. Explain with one concrete example how his teaching affected you. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'in particular'.

Exemplo: He taught me that formal education is not everything and that social intelligence (SQ) and emotional intelligence (EQ) are as important as IQ. For example, he helped me improve my communication skills by assigning group projects, which made me more confident working with others.

Sugestão: Remove fillers and unclear phrases ('AI' is unclear here). Start with a direct topic sentence, give a clear reason, and provide one specific example or memory. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for instance'.

Exemplo: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they built a strong foundation in subjects like mathematics and physics. For instance, one teacher spent extra time tutoring me after class, which helped me understand core concepts and left me with many positive memories.

× He teaches me physics in college.

✓ He teaches me physics at college.

The original sentence uses 'in college' which is acceptable but 'at college' is more natural; however the main issue is not third person singular. Keep 'teaches' as third person singular present; no change needed for verb form. Suggest using 'at' for natural preposition use.

× He's a he's my personal mentor also.

✓ He's also my personal mentor.

The original repeats the subject and contains an extra 'a' leading to ungrammatical structure. Remove the repetition and place 'also' in a natural position after the subject to produce a correct sentence.

× I don't wanna be a teacher because I'm not very much good at making people understand my words.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher because I'm not very good at making people understand what I say.

Use standard 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna'. 'Not very much good' is ungrammatical; use 'not very good'. Also replace 'my words' with 'what I say' for natural phrasing. Present participle 'making' is correct here; corrections address wording and adverb placement.

× Plus, teaching doesn't make me fascinated.

✓ Also, teaching doesn't fascinate me.

'Make me fascinated' is awkward: 'fascinate' is an active verb meaning 'to interest strongly'. Use 'teaching doesn't fascinate me' to express lack of interest. 'Plus' is informal; 'also' is preferable.

× I got a teacher from a past that I always remember.

✓ I had a teacher in the past whom I always remember.

Use 'had' instead of 'got' to indicate a past relationship. 'From a past' is incorrect; use 'in the past'. Use 'whom' or 'who' as the relative pronoun; 'whom' is more formal but 'who' is acceptable. This fixes sentence structure and preposition usage.

× He motivated me to do, uh, extracurricular activities and help me to, uh, understand many other topics rather than rather than the academic topics.

✓ He motivated me to do extracurricular activities and helped me understand many topics besides academic ones.

Maintain parallel past tense: 'motivated' and 'helped'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'rather than'. Use 'besides academic ones' or 'other than academic topics' for clearer comparison.

× No, I didn't remember about them.

✓ No, I don't remember them.

The question asks if the student is still in touch; present simple 'don't remember' is appropriate. 'Didn't remember about them' is incorrect: 'remember' in past tense plus 'about' is awkward. Use 'I don't remember them' or 'I don't remember anything about them'.

× He made me understand that education was not everything and also SQ and EQ was as important as IQ also.

✓ He made me understand that education is not everything and that SQ and EQ are as important as IQ.

Maintain tense consistency: general truths use present simple ('is', 'are'). 'SQ and EQ was' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. Remove redundant 'also' and place conjunction 'that' for clarity.

× No, I like my high school teachers more because, uh, the high school teachers actually created the base of mine in my education and they were very helpful to me.

✓ No, I like my high school teachers more because they actually created the foundation of my education and were very helpful to me.

Avoid repetition by replacing 'the high school teachers' with 'they'. Use 'foundation' instead of 'base' and 'of my education' rather than 'of mine in my education'. Remove filler 'uh' and ensure pronoun reference is clear.

× And with them I got AI, got so, so much memories.

✓ And with them I made so many memories.

'Got AI' is unclear and likely erroneous. 'Got so, so much memories' is ungrammatical: use 'made so many memories' or 'have so many memories'. 'So many memories' requires 'many' with countable noun 'memories'.