Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (thì và số nhiều), cấu trúc câu và tính súc tích; sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể bằng các liên từ phù hợp. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi từ vựng (mathematical teacher → maths teacher; logic thinking → logical thinking). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu, ví dụ: giới thiệu người đó, nêu lý do cụ thể, kết luận cảm xúc.

Exemplo: My favourite teacher was my high school maths teacher. She helped me improve my logical thinking by giving clear explanations and many practice problems. Because of her guidance, I gained confidence and started enjoying the subject. I still remember her kindness and teaching style.

Sugestão: Cải thiện tính logic và rõ ràng: nêu câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể với ví dụ, tránh câu mâu thuẫn và lỗi ngữ pháp (business woman → businesswoman; repetition errors). Sử dụng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example' để liên kết ý. Cần viết súc tích (dưới 5 câu).

Exemplo: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I prefer more creative and varied work. For example, I am interested in becoming an artist or a businesswoman, where each day brings different challenges. Teaching seems repetitive to me since lessons follow a similar routine every day.

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: tránh cấu trúc lộn xộn và cụm từ sai (would have mathematics?; just this disease?). Nên tổ chức câu: giới thiệu người, mô tả tính cách/ phương pháp dạy, nêu kết quả cụ thể. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (hardworking, passionate about mathematics, teaching style).

Exemplo: Yes, I still remember my high school maths teacher. She was very hardworking and passionate about mathematics, and her clear teaching style made difficult topics easier to understand. Because of her methods, I improved in maths and gained confidence in other science subjects.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và dùng từ chính xác (suburban → the suburbs; 'too old' nghe thiếu tế nhị — nói 'much older' hoặc 'retired'). Tránh tiếng lắp và hoàn thành ý. Nên có câu chủ đề rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể (khoảng cách, khác lối sống) và kết luận ngắn gọn.

Exemplo: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. Most of them have retired and live in the city centre, while I now live in the suburbs, so we rarely meet. Also, our lives have changed a lot since then, which makes keeping in contact difficult.

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, ngữ nghĩa và sự liên kết ý: dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích cụ thể các phương pháp trợ giúp (ví dụ: bài tập thêm, hướng dẫn từng bước, động viên). Tránh câu không rõ nghĩa và cảm xúc mơ hồ ('I feel it's disaster tomorrow'). Giữ dưới 5 câu, dùng linking words như 'for example' hoặc 'as a result'.

Exemplo: She helped me by giving extra practice problems and explaining each step patiently. For example, she would stay after class to go through difficult exercises with me and give feedback on my mistakes. As a result, my problem-solving skills improved and I felt more confident in exams.

× One of my favorite teacher was a mathematical teacher in my high school.

✓ One of my favorite teachers was a mathematics teacher in my high school.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires the noun to be plural ('teachers'). Also 'mathematical teacher' is unnatural; use 'mathematics teacher' or 'math teacher'. Use of 'was' is correct for past reference.

× At the time I was not really good at this subject and she helped me to have logic thinking which helped me a lot in doing practice and I still remember her a lot.

✓ At the time I was not very good at this subject, and she helped me develop logical thinking, which helped me a lot in practice, and I still remember her fondly.

Use 'very' instead of 'really' for formality and 'develop logical thinking' is the correct verb-noun collocation. 'Doing practice' is unidiomatic; use 'in practice'. 'Remember her a lot' should be 'remember her fondly' or 'remember her a lot' is informal.

× I think it's a boring job and I want to do something more creative, such as an artist or a business woman.

✓ I think it's a boring job and I want to do something more creative, such as become an artist or a businesswoman.

After 'such as' when giving roles, use the verb 'become' to indicate the intended profession. 'Business woman' should be combined as 'businesswoman'.

× I think it's more exciting to change. Work day by day or by years is not the same.

✓ I think it's more exciting to have variety; doing the same work day by day or year after year is not the same.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combine ideas into one sentence and use natural expressions: 'have variety' and 'year after year' or 'day by day' to show repetition.

× It's not the same to the picture because they have to to work repeatedly.

✓ It's not the same as painting because painters have to work repeatedly.

'Not the same to the picture' is incorrect; use 'not the same as painting' or 'as being a painter'. Remove duplicated 'to' and use the correct noun 'painters' to refer to people.

× Yes, it was my mathematical teacher in high school.

✓ Yes, it was my mathematics teacher in high school.

'Mathematical teacher' is less natural than 'mathematics teacher' or 'math teacher.' The sentence is otherwise grammatically acceptable.

× She was a very hardworking woman and she really would have mathematics as long as as well as teaching style, which helped me a lot because I was not good at mathematics and the other scientific subject, just this disease.

✓ She was a very hardworking woman and she was really good at mathematics as well as at teaching, which helped me a lot because I was not good at mathematics and other science subjects.

The original contains unclear and incorrect phrases: 'would have mathematics' and duplicated 'as'. Replace with 'was really good at mathematics as well as at teaching.' 'The other scientific subject' should be 'other science subjects.' Remove 'just this disease' which is nonsensical here.

× Honestly, no, because they are too old and now we live so far from each other.

✓ Honestly, no, because they are quite old and now we live far apart from each other.

'Too old' sounds awkward and possibly insensitive; 'quite old' is more natural. 'Live so far from each other' is better as 'live far apart from each other.' Pronouns are fine otherwise.

× Uh, they live in, uh, the center of the city, but I live in a suburban and I think it's not easy for me to talk with the very old one, especially the old, my old teacher.

✓ They live in the city center, but I live in the suburbs, and I think it's not easy for me to keep in touch with my older teachers, especially my old primary school teacher.

Use 'the city center' or 'city center' not 'in, uh, the center of the city.' 'A suburban' is incorrect; use 'the suburbs.' 'Talk with the very old one' is wrong; use 'keep in touch with my older teachers' or 'my old teacher.' Clarify 'primary school' if intended.

× You can't believe how many practice she gave me at that time.

✓ You can't believe how much practice she gave me at that time.

'Many' is used with countable nouns; 'practice' is uncountable, so use 'much practice.' Also 'she gave me' is correct past tense.

× I need my mathematical teacher in high school.

✓ I needed my mathematics teacher in high school.

Tense and meaning unclear: use past tense 'needed' to match context. 'Mathematics teacher' is preferred form.

× She realized that I was weak at the mathematics and she wanted to help me.

✓ She realized that I was weak in mathematics and she wanted to help me.

Use 'weak in mathematics' rather than 'weak at the mathematics.' Remove the article before 'mathematics.'

× I'm I knew that she was very good with me, but I feel it's disaster tomorrow.

✓ I knew that she was very good to me, but I felt it would be disastrous for me if I didn't improve.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Very good with me' should be 'very good to me.' 'I feel it's disaster tomorrow' is nonsensical; reinterpret as concern about future consequences and rephrase to 'I felt it would be disastrous if I didn't improve.'