Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 고치고, 정보를 논리적으로 배열하세요. 예를 들어 주제문으로 시작한 뒤(누구인지), 그 교사가 왜 특별한지 구체적 예시(행동이나 에피소드)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복(‘also’ 등)을 줄이고 동사 시제와 관사를 정확히 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. My favorite teacher from high school was my English teacher. She became a role model for me because she always showed genuine care for her students, often staying after class to help us with difficult topics. For example, she would organize extra conversation sessions every week to help shy students improve.

Sugestão: 자연스럽고 직접적인 주제문을 사용하고, 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. ‘umm’ 같은 음성 충격어를 줄이고 시제와 관사 사용을 바로잡으세요. 또한 한두 가지 구체적 경험(무슨 일을 했는지, 어떤 반응을 보였는지)을 덧붙이면 설득력이 올라갑니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future. I currently work part-time at an English academy, and I enjoy helping students learn. For instance, I designed simple speaking activities that increased my students' confidence, which made teaching very rewarding.

Sugestão: 문장이 길고 중복되며 끝이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 질문에 간결히 답한 뒤(누구인지, 언제인지), 그 교사를 기억하는 구체적 이유(헌신적인 행동이나 기억에 남는 사건)를 한두 문장으로 완성하세요. 불완전한 문장과 시제 혼동을 피하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. I still remember my high school English teacher who taught my homeroom class when I was in the first grade of high school. She was very dedicated and often stayed late to help students, which made a big impression on me even though she later became ill.

Sugestão: ‘in touch with’의 전치사 사용과 단수/복수 일치를 바로잡으세요. 답은 간단히 한 문장으로 하고, 이어서 기억나는 구체적 장면(무엇을 가르쳤는지, 왜 기억에 남는지)을 연결해 주세요. 현재·과거 시제 일관성도 체크하세요.

Exemplo: No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers, but I remember them well. For example, my third-grade teacher taught us how to jump rope and made PE class fun by organizing friendly competitions.

Sugestão: 답의 구조를 명확히 하고 문법(시제, 조동사, 목적어)을 수정하세요. 구체적 도움 방식(어떤 연습을 했는지, 어떤 결과가 있었는지)을 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다. 불필요한 ‘umm’은 제거하세요.

Exemplo: She helped me prepare for an English contest in high school by working with me on pronunciation. For example, she gave me daily drills, corrected my vowel sounds, and recorded my speaking so I could hear my mistakes, which improved my confidence during the contest.

× Yes I have favorite teacher in my high school she is English teacher and she's one of my role model because she loves the students and she also really cared about them and she also everyday.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher from my high school. She is an English teacher and she's one of my role models because she loves the students, really cares about them, and helps them every day.

문장에서 관사 a/an/the가 빠져 있습니다. 'a favorite teacher'와 'an English teacher'처럼 가산 단수 명사 앞에는 적절한 관사가 필요합니다. 또한 'role model'은 복수형이 될 수 있으므로 'one of my role models'로 고쳐야 합니다. 시제 일치와 어순도 수정했습니다. Suggestion: 가산 단수 명사 앞에 a/an/the를 항상 확인하고, 'one of my ...' 뒤에는 복수형을 사용하세요.

× Yes, teacher is one of my dream job because umm I recently doing a part time job in the English Academy and I feel enjoyment umm while I'm teaching the students.

✓ Yes, teaching is one of my dream jobs because I am recently doing a part-time job at an English academy and I enjoy teaching the students.

동사 시제와 형태가 부적절합니다. 'one of my dream job'에서는 'one of' 뒤에 복수형이 와야 하므로 'one of my dream jobs'로 고쳐야 합니다. 진행형 표현 'I recently doing'은 조동사 be가 빠져 'I am recently doing'이 되어야 하나, 일반적으로 'I am doing a part-time job' 혹은 'I recently got a part-time job'로 표현합니다. 'I feel enjoyment'은 어색하므로 'I enjoy'로 자연스럽게 고쳤습니다. Suggestion: 'one of my ...' 구문 뒤에는 복수형을 사용하고, 감정 표현에는 'enjoy' 같은 동사를 사용하세요.

× Yes, I have uh, my English teacher from my high school, she was a she was my home teacher and when I was first grade in my high school and she is so umm dedicated to the children, but she was sick and I have.

✓ Yes, I have an English teacher from my high school. She was my homeroom teacher when I was in my first year of high school. She was very dedicated to the students, but she was sick and I lost contact with her.

문장이 길게 이어지며 어순과 연결이 부적절합니다. 'home teacher'는 영어권에서 일반적으로 'homeroom teacher'라고 하고, 'when I was first grade'는 'when I was in my first year' 또는 'in first grade'로 고쳐야 합니다. 문장 끝의 'and I have'는 불완전하므로 의미에 맞게 'I lost contact with her'로 완성했습니다. Suggestion: 복잡한 생각은 짧은 문장으로 나누고, 적절한 명칭(homeroom teacher)과 시제 표현을 사용하세요.

× No, actually I'm not in touch to my primary teacher, but I still remember them. She was the teacher when I was in my third grade of elementary primary school. She teaches a jump rope.

✓ No, actually I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers, but I still remember them. She was my teacher when I was in third grade of primary school. She taught us how to jump rope.

'in touch to'는 잘못된 전치사 사용으로 'in touch with'로 고쳐야 합니다. 'primary teacher'는 복수화하여 'primary school teachers'가 자연스럽습니다. 'third grade of elementary primary school'은 중복 표현이므로 'third grade of primary school'로 줄였습니다. 현재 시제 'She teaches a jump rope'는 과거 상황을 설명하므로 'taught us how to jump rope'로 수정했습니다. Suggestion: 'in touch with' 전치사 구문을 외우고, 학교 관련 표현에서 중복을 피하며 행위는 적절한 시제로 표현하세요.

× Umm, my favorite teacher helped me when I was preparing my English contest in my high school. I was umm feel difficulty because I'm not good at the pronunciation in English but she helped me how to pronounce.

✓ Umm, my favorite teacher helped me when I was preparing for an English contest in high school. I was having difficulty because I wasn't good at English pronunciation, but she helped me with how to pronounce words.

'preparing my English contest'는 전치사 for가 필요합니다. 'I was umm feel difficulty'는 동사 형태 오류로 'I was having difficulty' 또는 'I had difficulty'로 고쳐야 합니다. 'I'm not good at the pronunciation in English'는 어색하므로 'I wasn't good at English pronunciation'로 시제와 어순을 맞췄습니다. 마지막 문장은 'helped me how to pronounce' 대신 'helped me with how to pronounce words'처럼 명확한 목적어가 필요합니다. Suggestion: 'prepare for' 구문을 사용하고, 'have difficulty' 표현은 진행형이나 과거형으로 자연스럽게 사용하세요.