Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct hesitations and repetitions, and add one specific example to support why tidiness calms you. Use clear linking words and avoid filler sounds.

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because an organized space helps me feel calm and focused. For example, when my desk is uncluttered I can find my notebooks and pens quickly, which saves time and reduces stress.

Sugestão: Avoid making medical claims about others (e.g., 'hoarding disorder') and unclear phrasing. Respond directly with a topic sentence, then explain briefly and clearly why, using linking words and specific details.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t. My mother preferred to keep many things around the house, so my room was often cluttered. As a result, I felt stressed and uncomfortable, which is why I now prefer to keep my own space tidy.

Sugestão: Give a clearer, structured method with linking words and one concrete routine or tool you use. Remove repetitions and acknowledge occasional lapses briefly.

Exemplo: I usually tidy my study space by focusing on one area at a time. For example, I start with the desk surface, put away loose papers in folders, and store pens in a holder. Sometimes I skip a session, but I tidy properly at least once a week.

Sugestão: Fix grammar errors and contradictory phrasing (‘unnecessary and is a must’). State your opinion clearly, give two concise reasons with linking words, and finish with a brief concession if needed.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it helps clear the mind and makes it easier to concentrate. However, it can be time-consuming, so I try to maintain small daily habits to keep my space manageable.

× Yes, I like to keep everything tidy because I love to see everything organized and clean and feeling really calm.

✓ Yes, I like to keep everything tidy because I love to see everything organized and clean and feel really calm.

The phrase 'feeling really calm' uses a present participle that doesn't parallel the earlier verb 'see'. Using the base verb 'feel' maintains parallel structure ('see ... and feel ...') and correctly expresses the result of seeing things tidy.

× When you when I see everything is is it's own place and I can find my own stuff easily, so it's really releasing.

✓ When I see everything is in its own place and I can find my stuff easily, it is really relaxing.

Problems: extraneous 'you when', repeated words, wrong possessive 'it's' instead of 'its', and wrong adjective 'releasing' should be 'relaxing' to describe a feeling. Use 'its' for possession, remove duplicates, and use 'relaxing'.

× No, actually not because my mom is very messy so she has like, uh, hoarding disorder.

✓ No, actually not, because my mom was very messy and seemed to have a hoarding disorder.

The student is referring to childhood, so past tense is appropriate: 'was' instead of 'is'. Also 'seemed to have' is a more natural way to report behavior in the past.

× She never kept everything tidy and I also felt so stressed about it, but I used to it because I was living like that single child, so I don't like it.

✓ She never kept everything tidy and I felt very stressed about it, but I got used to it because I was an only child, so I didn't like it.

Errors: 'used to it' is incorrect; 'got used to it' or 'was used to it' is correct for becoming accustomed. 'Living like that single child' is awkward; use 'an only child'. Maintain past tense ('didn't like it').

× I try to organize from from the corner first.

✓ I try to organize from the corner first.

Duplicate word 'from' should be removed. No article change needed; sentence is fine after deletion.

× Whenever I look it's messy.

✓ Whenever I look, it is messy.

Add a comma and expand contraction for clarity; sentence structure is otherwise acceptable but punctuation improves readability.

× I'll just clean that first and then continue other thing.

✓ I'll just clean that first and then continue with other things.

Use 'continue with' plus plural 'things' to refer generally, and add plural to match indefinite plural meaning.

× Sometimes I get lazy as well but not that messy.

✓ Sometimes I get lazy as well, but I'm not that messy.

Use contraction or full form of 'I am' to describe a current state; 'not that messy' needs the verb 'am' to be a complete clause.

× Yes, exactly. As I growing older I felt like being tidy is unnecessary and is a must, you know, because it makes our mind clear as well and really relaxing when you see everything is tidy.

✓ Yes, exactly. As I grow older, I feel that being tidy is not unnecessary but a must, because it clears the mind and is really relaxing when you see everything tidy.

Tense and meaning: use present tense 'grow' and 'feel' for ongoing change. Original sentence contradicted itself ('is unnecessary and is a must'); clarify to likely intended meaning. Use 'clears the mind' and 'is really relaxing' for natural phrasing.

× But yeah, it takes time.

✓ But yeah, it takes time.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct as is.