Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh), correct grammar (e.g., 'Keeping my room tidy clears my mind and is good for hygiene'), and limit to up to 4–5 short sentences. Add one specific detail to support why you tidy every Sunday.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I tidy my room every Sunday because keeping it clean clears my mind and helps with hygiene. For example, I spend thirty minutes each Sunday putting books away, vacuuming and wiping surfaces so I can start the week focused.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and coherence, use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Clarify unclear phrases like 'compulsory room' and 'very tight'.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I lived in a boarding school where teachers checked our rooms every day, so we had to keep them tidy. Because inspections were strict, I learned to make my bed and organize my books each morning.

Sugestão: Be specific and use varied vocabulary. Use present simple, remove fillers, and sequence actions with linking words (first, then, finally). Mention concrete routines and frequency to sound natural and informative.

Exemplo: I keep my study space tidy by following a simple routine. First, I put books back on the shelf after I finish using them; then I wipe the desk with a cloth; finally, I clear away pens and papers into a small box so the area stays neat every day.

Sugestão: Make a clear, structured response: one topic sentence stating your opinion, then two specific reasons with examples. Correct grammar (e.g., 'it saves time') and avoid unfinished phrases. Use linking words like 'not only... but also'.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is necessary. Not only does a tidy room make it easy to find things and save time, but it also reduces dust and germs, which is better for our health. For instance, I find items faster and get fewer allergies when my room is clean.

× I like to tidy my room every Sunday because uh, keep tidy the room is made me uh C clear my mind and it is about hygiene as well.

✓ I like to tidy my room every Sunday because keeping my room tidy clears my mind and it is good for hygiene.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and ungrammatical phrases ('keep tidy the room', 'is made me C clear my mind'). This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Use the gerund 'keeping' to express the action as a noun, place the subject 'my room' after the verb 'tidy', and use correct verb form 'clears' to agree with singular subject 'keeping my room tidy'. Also replace 'it is about hygiene' with 'it is good for hygiene' for natural meaning.

× When I was a child I lived in a boarding school so my teacher is always checking.

✓ When I was a child I lived in a boarding school so my teacher was always checking.

The clause refers to past habitual action, so the verb should be past continuous 'was always checking' rather than present 'is always checking' (ID 2). Maintain past tense to match 'When I was a child' and 'lived'.

× So we have to keep the rooms tidy and it's a compulsory room and the teacher come to check every day.

✓ So we had to keep the rooms tidy because it was compulsory, and the teacher came to check every day.

The context is past, so modal/auxiliary 'have to' should be past 'had to', and verb 'come' should be past 'came' (ID 4). Also rephrase 'it's a compulsory room' to 'it was compulsory' for clarity and tense consistency.

× So I used to keep the room very tight.

✓ So I used to keep the room very tidy.

'Tight' is incorrect word choice here and creates a sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26). The intended adjective is 'tidy'. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action.

× It is very simple to give my uh, room clean and look nice.

✓ It is very simple to keep my room clean and looking nice.

Original phrasing 'to give my room clean' is ungrammatical. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Use verb 'keep' with object 'my room' and 'clean', and use 'looking nice' or 'and look nice' to show result.

× Just uh, put the book back, uh, after use the book and then, uh, just clear the table and just clean the table if I use it and clear the paint space.

✓ Just put the books back after using them, then clear and clean the table if I use it and tidy the painting supplies area.

Multiple issues: article and noun number use ('the book' vs 'books', ID 17/22) and gerund after preposition ('after using them'). Also streamline repeated phrases. Use plural 'books' or 'a book' depending on context and pronoun 'them' to refer back. 'Clear the paint space' is unclear; 'tidy the painting supplies area' is more natural.

× Yes, absolutely keeping the room tidy is not only just for uh, easy to find the items, but also very important for uh, our health and it's save time to when we need something to find it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Keeping the room tidy is not only useful for easily finding items, but is also very important for our health and saves time when we need something.

Problems include infinitive/gerund choice ('easy to find' should be 'for easily finding' or 'useful for easily finding') and verb form 'it's save' should be 'saves' to agree with subject 'keeping the room tidy' (ID 6 for present tense and ID 2 for third person singular). Reorder for clarity and natural phrasing.