Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. "a bit and people kind of lazy"). Use past/time phrases correctly (e.g. "when I get home").

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy, but I don't always succeed. After school I often feel tired and excited, so I leave my things on the floor; for example, books and clothes pile up quickly. However, I try to clean once or twice a week to keep the mess under control.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct tense and phrasing. Use linking words to show sequence and give a specific routine (how often). Replace vague phrases like "about 3-3 days of time" with clearer expressions such as "every two or three days".

Exemplo: Yes, I usually kept my room tidy as a child because I had lots of energy and my mother encouraged me. As a result, I cleaned and tidied everything every two or three days, so my room stayed organized most of the time.

Sugestão: Be clearer about the methods you use and use correct vocabulary (e.g. "storage box" or "box for supplies" instead of "pack up box"). Use linking words (first, then, finally) and be specific about actions and frequency. Avoid unclear phrases like "Internet box."

Exemplo: I keep my study area tidy by using a storage box in the corner for books and papers. First, I put books I rarely use in the box; then I recycle or donate books I no longer need. Finally, I tidy my desk every evening so it stays neat for the next day.

Sugestão: Express your opinion directly and use correct collocations (e.g. "sense of tidiness" not "tightness"). Use one or two clear reasons with examples and linking words (because, therefore). Keep sentences concise and avoid redundant wording.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because a sense of tidiness gives me calm and helps me concentrate. For example, when my desk is clean I can focus on studying and finish tasks faster, so I feel less stressed.

× Well, I really want to keep all the things clean and tidy, but actually I cannot do it all the time because I'm a bit and people kind of lazy and I'm really excited after school when I back home and I don't really want to pick up all the things.

✓ Well, I really want to keep everything clean and tidy, but actually I cannot do it all the time because I'm a bit lazy and people are kind of lazy, and I'm really excited after school when I get back home so I don't really want to pick things up.

The sentence misuses adjectives and adverbs ('a bit and people kind of lazy' is ungrammatical) and has wording problems. Replace 'all the things' with 'everything' or 'my things'; use 'a bit lazy' to describe the speaker; include a verb for 'people are kind of lazy'; use 'get back home' for returning. Also combine clauses more clearly with conjunctions. Suggestion: simplify phrases, ensure each adjective modifies a noun, and include required verbs.

× So my room always seemed really messy.

✓ So my room always seems really messy.

The student used past tense 'seemed' while describing a habitual present state. Use present tense 'seems' to match 'always'. Suggestion: match tense to habitual statements (use present simple for regular states).

× Yes because when I was a child I have plenty of energy and my mom always urged me to do not.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child I had plenty of energy and my mom always urged me not to.

Mixed tenses: 'was' (past) requires past 'had' not 'have'. Also 'do not' is incorrect after 'urged me'—use 'urged me not to' + verb or simply 'urged me not to' with implied verb. Use correct past forms. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same past timeline and use correct negative infinitive structure after 'urged'.

× So I will always clean my room and about 3-3 days of time and so in the time my room is pretty clean and keep all the things organized.

✓ So I would always clean my room every two or three days, and during that time my room was pretty clean and kept everything organized.

Tense and aspect errors: student mixes future 'will' with past context. If referring to childhood habit, use past habitual 'would' or 'used to' and past forms 'was' and 'kept'. Also '3-3 days' is unclear; better 'every two or three days'. Suggestion: use 'would' or 'used to' for past habits and ensure verbs in following clauses are past tense.

× Well I always managed to keep my study really clean and just I have a a pack up box in the corner of the room.

✓ Well, I always manage to keep my study really clean, and I have a pack-up box in the corner of the room.

The student used past 'managed' but context seems present habit (answer about current study space). Use present simple 'manage'. Also fix word order 'just I have' to 'and I have' and hyphenate 'pack-up box' (or 'storage box'). Suggestion: choose tense consistent with the time reference and correct simple word order.

× So I will pack all the book and then I will not use these days Internet box and some book I may not use anymore I will just throw it away.

✓ So I pack all the books, and then I put away the internet router box; for books I may not use anymore, I just throw them away.

Article and plural errors: 'all the book' should be 'all the books' or 'all my books'. 'These days Internet box' is unclear; likely 'internet router box' or 'internet box' with article. Use plural 'books' and consistent present tense if habitual. Also split run-on sentence. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and articles, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× Yes, because a sense of tightness always give me a people, a sense of calm and a peace.

✓ Yes, because a sense of tidiness always gives me a feeling of calm and peace.

Incorrect word choice: 'tightness' is wrong; 'tidiness' or 'neatness' fits. Subject-verb agreement: 'a sense ... gives' requires 'gives' (singular). 'Give me a people' is ungrammatical — use 'gives me a feeling' or 'makes me feel'. Use 'calm and peace' without extra articles. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocations ('feeling of calm').

× And I think keeping the space clean is really important and will make people unwind themselves better and keep their happy during their work of study.

✓ And I think keeping the space clean is really important; it helps people relax and stay happy while they study or work.

Pronoun and phrase errors: 'make people unwind themselves better' is clumsy — use 'help people relax'. 'Keep their happy' is incorrect pronoun/adjective use; use 'stay happy'. 'During their work of study' is awkward; use 'while they study or work'. Suggestion: use natural verbs for emotional states ('relax', 'stay happy') and correct pronoun-adjective combinations.