Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct verb forms and word order.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I believe a tidy environment reflects a clear mindset, so when my desk is neat I can focus better. For example, I sort my papers into folders and clear clutter each evening, which helps me think more clearly the next day.

Sugestão: Correct past-tense forms and sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence about your childhood habit, then give specific examples and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Remove unclear phrases and fix vocabulary (e.g. 'birth rooms tiny' unclear).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My sister and I used to tidy our rooms every month because our parents insisted on a monthly deep clean. For example, we would sort toys and donate items we no longer used so that it was easier to find things later.

Sugestão: Organize answer into clear steps and avoid hesitations. Use linking words (first, then, finally) and correct small grammar errors. Give one concrete routine and finish the final sentence fully.

Exemplo: I tidy my study space by only keeping current materials on the desk. First, I choose the notebook and textbooks I need for the session. Then, when I finish, I put them back in my bag and wipe the desk, which keeps the area neat and reduces distractions.

Sugestão: Make a concise argument with one clear main idea and two supporting points. Fix repetitions and grammatical errors, and use linking words like 'therefore' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I think tidiness is necessary because it helps improve concentration and reduces stress. For instance, a tidy desk makes it easier to find documents quickly, so I can focus on tasks and plan the next steps efficiently.

× Yes, I like keeping things tidy.

✓ Yes, I like keeping things tidy.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the verb + -ing form after 'like' to express a general preference.

× I strongly believe that the state of my things, my table and my environment reflects my mental perspective as of the moment.

✓ I strongly believe that the state of my things, my table, and my environment reflects my current mental state.

The original is wordy and awkward. 'As of the moment' is non-idiomatic; 'current mental state' is clearer. Commas were added for correct list punctuation.

× So when things are so messy and out of order, I tend to be.

✓ So when things are so messy and out of order, I tend to be unsettled.

The sentence ends with an incomplete predicate 'tend to be.' It needs an adjective to complete the idea. 'Unsettled' fits the context.

× In chaos too, I tend to to not think clearly, so I like to think keep my things tidy.

✓ In chaos, I also tend not to think clearly, so I try to keep my things tidy.

Fix duplicate 'to', incorrect word order ('tend to not think' → 'tend not to think'), misplaced 'think' and wrong verb choice. 'I also' is more natural than 'too' at start; 'try to keep' expresses intention.

× Yes, me and my sister, we keep birth rooms tiny as a child, every month we have what we call general cleaning to just let go of the things that are not using anymore.

✓ Yes, my sister and I kept our rooms tidy as children; every month we had what we called a general cleaning to get rid of things we no longer used.

Multiple tense and pronoun errors: use 'my sister and I' (correct subject order), past tense 'kept' and 'had' for childhood, 'rooms' not 'birth rooms', 'get rid of' is idiomatic for discarding, and 'no longer used' replaces 'not using anymore'.

× And it was also one of the major values that our parents taught us, keep our things tidy and in order so that it would not.

✓ It was also one of the major values our parents taught us: keep our things tidy and in order so that they would not be lost or hard to find.

Sentence is fragmented and pronoun 'it' unclear. Replace with 'they' referring to 'things' and complete the clause explaining consequences (lost or hard to find). Use colon to connect clauses.

× And it difficult to find things when you're looking for those.

✓ And it was difficult to find things when you were looking for them.

Missing verb 'was' (sentence without a verb). Use past tense 'were' to match context and correct pronoun 'them' for 'things'.

× I keep my work or study space that I do by putting out only the things that I would use.

✓ I keep my work or study space tidy by putting out only the things that I will use.

Original has extra phrase 'that I do' and mixed tense. Use 'keep...tidy' and 'will use' (or 'use') to describe items intended for current task.

× I have this tendency to put everything out so that, umm, I see everything, but I realize that it's not working for me.

✓ I have a tendency to put everything out so that I can see it, but I realize that it's not working for me.

Minor corrections: 'this tendency' → 'a tendency' is more natural; 'so that I see everything' → 'so that I can see it' clarifies purpose and reference.

× So I just put out the things, the notebooks, the notes that I would use.

✓ So I just put out the things—the notebooks and notes—that I will use.

Change 'would' to 'will' to indicate present/future use within the task context; punctuation adjusted for clarity.

× And bring them back in my bag whenever I am done with it or I am finished with it.

✓ And I put them back in my bag whenever I am done with them.

Sentence fragment missing subject/verb; use 'I put' to complete sentence. Use 'them' to agree with plural 'notebooks and notes' and avoid repetition 'done with them' rather than 'finished with it'.

× And then I proceed to the next notes that I.

✓ Then I move on to the next notes that I need.

Original ends abruptly. 'Move on to' or 'proceed to' followed by what is needed completes the thought; add 'need' to finish clause.

× Yes, it is necessary to be tidy because our things are reflection of our current mindset.

✓ Yes, it is necessary to be tidy because our things are a reflection of our current mindset.

Missing article 'a' before 'reflection' (article error). Present tense 'are' is fine.

× When when we keep our things clean or when we keep our desk tidy.

✓ When we keep our things clean or our desk tidy,

Duplicate 'when' removed and clause left as dependent; needs to connect to main clause. Comma indicates continuation.

× It also means that our mind is in order, our thoughts are in order, hence we could concentrate and think clearly.

✓ It also means that our minds and thoughts are in order, so we can concentrate and think clearly.

Use plural 'minds' to match 'our', replace 'hence' with more natural 'so', and use 'can' instead of 'could' to state general present ability.

× Whatever the next steps or the necessary steps that we have to do.

✓ This helps us determine the next steps we need to take.

Original is a fragment. Provide a complete clause that conveys the intended meaning: linking tidiness to planning next actions and using idiomatic 'need to take'.