Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief reason using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "tidy" used too often). Aim for 2–3 sentences and correct small grammar issues.

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a neat environment helps me focus. However, when I’m extremely tired or busy I sometimes leave things messy until I have time to organize them.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and clarify sequence of events. Use a clear topic sentence, then explain cause-and-effect with linking words. Replace incorrect phrase "neck to me" with "nagged me" and adjust tense consistency.

Exemplo: No, my room was quite messy as a child and my parents often nagged me about it. I think their reminders encouraged me to become tidier, and now I find being organized reduces my stress.

Sugestão: Fix unclear phrasing and make the routine explicit. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "first", "then") and correct collocations ("put things back in the right place"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually tidy my study area as soon as I finish working. First I put books and stationery back in their places so I don’t get lazy and leave a mess later.

Sugestão: Give a clearer, more natural opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use a linking phrase to contrast general view and personal experience. Correct small grammar issues ("depends on people" → "it depends on the person").

Exemplo: I don’t think tidiness is necessary for everyone; it depends on the person. For me, however, a tidy desk and room reduce stress and boost my motivation.

× No actually my room was very messy and my parents always neck to me.

✓ No, actually my room was very messy and my parents always nagged me.

This sentence has two issues: incorrect verb choice 'neck to' (not English) and tense consistency. 'Neck to' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'nag'. Because this describes repeated past action, use the past tense 'nagged'. Also add a comma after 'No' for natural speech punctuation. Suggestion: use common verbs and match tense to the time frame (past).

× Probably that's why now I started getting more tidy.

✓ Probably that's why I have started becoming tidier now.

The time reference 'now' links past change to the present, so use present perfect 'have started' rather than simple past 'started'. 'Getting more tidy' is awkward; use 'becoming tidier'. 'Tidy' as comparative uses 'tidier'. Suggestion: use present perfect to show an action that began in the past and continues to the present and use natural adjective forms.

× Normally etched in as I finished all the work or study.

✓ Normally I put things away as soon as I finish my work or studying.

The original sentence is ungrammatical: 'etched in' is incorrect here and the verb forms and word order are wrong. Use a clear subject 'I' and phrase 'as soon as' with present simple 'finish' for habitual actions. Use 'studying' or 'my studies' for noun form. Suggestion: use simple habitual present tense and standard phrases like 'put things away' and 'as soon as'.

× I try to put things back in right place straight away because otherwise I become lazy and then I just leave it in mess so.

✓ I try to put things back in the right place straight away because otherwise I become lazy and just leave them in a mess.

Several errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'right place'; wrong object pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to match plural 'things'; prepositional phrase 'in mess' should be 'in a mess'; extraneous word 'so' at the end is unnecessary. Suggestion: ensure articles before singular nouns, match pronouns to noun number, and use common collocations like 'in a mess'.

× I don't think it's necessary. I can say depends on people, but in my case it helps me a lot.

✓ I don't think it's necessary. I would say it depends on the person, but in my case it helps me a lot.

'I can say depends on people' is ungrammatical. Use a modal 'would' or phrase 'I would say' for opinions. 'Depends on people' is vague; better 'depends on the person' or 'depends on people' with clearer structure. Suggestion: use 'I would say' to frame opinions and complete the clause 'it depends on...'.

× I feel less stressed and then also I can get more motivated if I see tidy table or tidy room.

✓ I feel less stressed and also more motivated if I see a tidy table or a tidy room.

Missing indefinite articles 'a' before 'tidy table' and 'tidy room'; awkward adverb placement 'and then also' should be 'and also' or 'and'. Combine 'can get more motivated' into 'more motivated' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable nouns and keep adverbs in natural positions.