Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid awkward grammar and redundancy (e.g., "their place", "until unless"). Use correct collocations like "keep things tidy" or "clean".

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I feel uncomfortable when things are out of place, so I usually put items back where they belong as soon as I notice them. For example, after using a notebook I always return it to my shelf so my desk stays neat.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give a specific anecdote. Use consistent tense (past for childhood) and natural phrasing ("used to" or "I would"). Avoid vague phrases like "something special" without explanation.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child. I treated tidying up like a game — I would time myself to see how quickly I could organize my toys, and that made cleaning fun and helped everything stay organized.

Sugestão: Give a clear procedure with linking words and correct grammar. Use linking words like "after" or "then" and avoid repetitive phrases. Be specific about methods or tools you use.

Exemplo: I keep my study space tidy by putting things back immediately after I finish using them. After a study session, I file papers, return books to the shelf, and wipe the desk, so the area is ready for the next time I work.

Sugestão: This answer is unclear and contains inappropriate language. Give a polite, coherent opinion with reasons and an example. Use correct vocabulary ("personal hygiene", "neat appearance") and avoid insults or filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is important. A neat appearance and clean surroundings make a good impression on others and can improve your confidence. For instance, wearing clean, ironed clothes and keeping your workspace tidy helped me feel more professional during presentations.

× Yes, I am really concerned about cleanness.

✓ Yes, I am really concerned about cleanliness.

The noun 'cleanness' is correct but 'cleanliness' is the more natural and commonly used noun in this context. Use 'cleanliness' when referring to the general state of being clean. Suggestion: replace 'cleanness' with 'cleanliness'.

× If there is something not on their place, I can't rest until unless I just make things to be on the right place.

✓ If something is not in its place, I can't rest until I put things in the right place.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'place' (not 'on'); use the possessive pronoun 'its' for a singular object (not 'their'); 'until unless' is redundant — use only 'until'; 'make things to be' is awkward — use 'put things'. Suggestions: use 'in its place', 'until', and 'put'.

× Well, as a child, cleaning your room was also something special for me.

✓ Well, as a child, cleaning my room was also something special for me.

The sentence switches perspective improperly by using 'your' while speaking about personal childhood experience. Use first person 'my' to match 'as a child' and the speaker. Keep past tense 'was' to describe a past habit. Suggestion: use consistent personal pronouns.

× It was like I am playing more.

✓ It felt like I was playing more.

Mixing past ('was') with present ('am') is incorrect. Use past tense 'felt' and 'was' to maintain consistent past narrative. Suggestion: use past forms when describing past experiences.

× So yes, I always keep my room tidy and everything was organized.

✓ So yes, I always keep my room tidy and everything is organized.

The sentence mixes present simple ('always keep') with past passive ('was organized'). To describe a current habitual state, use present simple for both: 'keep' and 'is organized'. If referring to past habit, change 'always keep' to 'always kept'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent.

× Well, by organizing everything where it supposed to be after completing my work or study, I put back every single thing into its place, desired place and then I just move.

✓ Well, by organizing everything where it is supposed to be after completing my work or study, I put every single thing back in its desired place and then I leave.

Missing auxiliary 'is' in 'supposed to be'; use 'in' with 'place' not 'into' (both can be used but 'in its place' is natural); word order 'put back every single thing' is better as 'put every single thing back'; 'desired place' should be 'desired place' preceded by 'its'; 'then I just move' is unclear — 'leave' or 'move on' fits better. Suggestion: include 'is', use natural word order, and choose clearer verb 'leave' or 'move on'.

× Yes, it's necessary to be tidy.

✓ Yes, it's necessary to be tidy.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included to show it was checked.)

× Like you know, if you're not too clean and very not clean where iron clothes, no one will try to engage or talk to you.

✓ For example, if you don't keep your clothes clean or iron them properly, people may not want to talk to you.

Original has awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'not too clean and very not clean' is unclear; 'where iron clothes' is ungrammatical. Use clearer verbs: 'keep your clothes clean' and 'iron them properly'. 'No one will try to engage or talk to you' is more naturally 'people may not want to talk to you'. Suggestion: simplify and use standard verbs and modal 'may' for possibility.

× If you cleanliness is very important and it's necessary, yes, **** you.

✓ If cleanliness is very important to you, then yes, it matters.

Grammar errors: 'If you cleanliness' should be 'If cleanliness is very important to you' — correct word order and pronoun use. The original ends with unclear and inappropriate words ('**** you'); replace with a polite, meaningful phrase such as 'it matters' or 'it is important'. Suggestion: use correct noun phrase order and avoid offensive language.