Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct grammar, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Mention frequency clearly and a reason. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't usually keep things very tidy; I'm a fairly casual person. However, I tidy my desk about every ten days because I need to be able to find important documents. This routine helps me balance neatness with my busy schedule.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question, correct grammatical errors (e.g., 'broader' unclear—likely 'boarder'), and give specific supporting details using linking words. Stay within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I didn't keep my room tidy as a child because I was a boarder from the age of six. At school, the staff looked after shared areas, and at home my parents took care of household chores, so I wasn't responsible for tidying my room.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and smoother linking words ('so', 'therefore'), and be specific about methods you use to keep the space tidy. Limit to 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I tidy my study area every ten days and try to keep it neat during that period by putting things back after use. This saves me time for my experiments and other work, so I can focus without frequent interruptions.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first, then add one or two clear reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ('have' -> 'has') and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a brief consideration of another viewpoint.

Exemplo: I don't think being very tidy is necessary for everyone because I feel relaxed when my environment is casual. However, if a person has strict rules at work or home, then being tidy is important to meet those expectations.

× Actually not, I'm a casual person, I want everything just be casual and also umm.

✓ Actually not. I'm a casual person; I want everything to just be casual.

The sentence misuses pronoun/structure 'just be casual'—the verb requires an infinitive 'to be'. Also run-on sentence: split into two sentences or use a semicolon. Suggest using 'to be' after 'want' and punctuation to separate ideas.

× But my task will not be so messy because I need to find something.

✓ But my workspace will not be so messy because I need to find things.

'Task' is semantically odd; 'workspace' or 'desk' fits context. 'Find something' suggests singular; use plural 'things' for general searching. Present participle error: original phrasing awkward—use simple present or future as appropriate. Use 'will not be' for future state and clearer noun.

× If I need I tidy my desk every 10 days.

✓ If I need to, I tidy my desk every 10 days.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'need' and missing comma. The conditional/time clause needs 'to' for correct verb complement. Alternatively 'If necessary, I tidy my desk every 10 days.'

× No because I'm a broader since I was only 6 year old and I spend all the time in school and in the school the life teacher will help us to tidy the communal area and after go home my parents will take good care of me.

✓ No, because I was often away from home since I was only six years old; I spent most of the time at school, where the life teacher helped us tidy the communal area, and after I went home my parents took good care of me.

Multiple pronoun and tense issues: 'broader' is incorrect word choice—likely 'away from home' or 'boarding student'. Use past tense 'was' and 'spent' for childhood. 'Life teacher will help' should be past 'helped'. Add subject 'I' before 'went home'. Also '6 year old' needs hyphens as 'six years old' in words. Suggest simpler clauses and correct past tense consistency.

× I will tidy my study area for every 10 days and I will try to not mess it up in the for those 10 days so I don't put much time on tidying the desk or my room so I can put more time on doing my experiments and so on.

✓ I tidy my study area every ten days, and I try not to mess it up during those ten days so I don't have to spend much time tidying the desk or my room and can spend more time doing my experiments.

Avoid future 'will' when describing habitual actions; use simple present 'I tidy'. 'Try to not mess' should be 'try not to mess'. Remove extraneous words 'in the for'. Use 'during those ten days' for clarity. 'Put time on' is incorrect; use 'spend time doing'. Adjust verb forms for habitual context.

× I don't think so because I'm a casual person, I don't do tidy things much and I feel relaxed about that.

✓ I don't think so because I'm a casual person; I don't tidy things much and I feel relaxed about that.

'Do tidy things' is awkward; use verb 'tidy' directly. Also run-on sentence: use semicolon or split. Ensure parallel structure: 'I don't tidy things much' is correct.

× But if somebody have some requirements about that then maybe they should do the tidy things and put a lot of time on that.

✓ But if somebody has requirements about that, then maybe they should tidy and spend a lot of time on it.

Subject-verb agreement: 'somebody have' should be 'somebody has'. 'Do the tidy things' is unnatural—use 'tidy'. 'Put a lot of time on' incorrect preposition—use 'spend a lot of time on it'. Also add commas for clarity.