Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one brief, specific example. Avoid hesitation words (uh) and awkward phrasing ("where can I get my friends"). Use correct word order and finish sentences. Keep under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I like to keep my things tidy because it helps me find items quickly. For example, once I misplaced a stapler on my desk, but because I always put stationery in the same place, I found it in my bedroom within minutes.

Sugestão: Give a direct, natural response and add one clear specific detail. Reduce hesitations and repetitive words. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas (e.g., "for example" or "because"). Keep responses concise and varied in vocabulary (use "misplaced" or "left" instead of repeating "lost").

Exemplo: Not really. I didn't understand the importance of tidiness as a child, so I often left toys scattered on the floor. For example, I frequently misplaced small toys because I didn't put them back in a box after playing.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence describing your method, then give a specific example with correct grammar. Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing ("one of the most important things that to keep"). Use linking words like "for example" appropriately. Mention routines or tools (labels, trays) to show specificity.

Exemplo: I keep my workspace tidy by always returning items to their designated places and using simple systems. For example, I label folders for different projects and always file company documents in the same folder so I can retrieve them easily.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly, then explain your opinion with a concise reason and one brief example. Avoid contradictory phrases and wordiness ("but however"). Use clearer comparisons and correct collocations ("stationery" and "tools" usage).

Exemplo: I think it depends. Being tidy is helpful, but some people are comfortable with a messy appearance as long as they can find things. For example, a creative colleague keeps a cluttered desk but always knows where their stationery is, so it doesn't affect their work.

× Yes, I like to keep my things tidy so I would know where can I get my friends if I ever lost one.

✓ Yes, I like to keep my things tidy so I would know where to get them if I ever lost one.

This sentence has sentence structure and pronoun reference issues. The clause 'where can I get my friends' uses question word order in a statement; change to 'where to get' for an indirect question. 'My friends' does not match context (losing objects), so replace with 'them' to refer back to 'things'. Also 'if I ever lost one' is acceptable in meaning; keep tense consistent.

× I remember I lost uh, a stapler, uh, once uh, on my desk and I immediately went to my bedroom and found my lost, uh, stapler at the.

✓ I remember I once lost a stapler on my desk and I immediately went to my bedroom and found the stapler there.

The original has redundant fillers and an incomplete ending ('at the.'). Reorder words for natural English: 'I remember I once lost a stapler on my desk' or 'I once lost a stapler on my desk.' Use 'found the stapler there' to complete the thought and avoid the incorrect fragment 'at the.'

× For example, when I was a child, I was playing with my toys on the ground and I always lost my toys, uh, because I didn't keep things, uh, tidy and organized.

✓ For example, when I was a child, I played with my toys on the floor and I often lost them because I didn't keep things tidy and organized.

Use simple past 'played' for habitual past actions rather than past continuous 'was playing.' Replace 'on the ground' with 'on the floor' for natural English. 'Always lost' is exaggerated; 'often lost' fits typical meaning. Remove fillers and redundant commas.

× Having the discipline to put the things back where they belong is one of the most important things that to keep things organised and tidy.

✓ Having the discipline to put things back where they belong is one of the most important ways to keep things organized and tidy.

The clause 'important things that to keep' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'one of the most important ways to keep' to express purpose. Also remove the unnecessary article 'the' before 'things' when speaking generally.

× For example, if I use uh, some of the company's properties like uh, files, I will always keep them on the same folder.

✓ For example, if I use some of the company's property, such as files, I always keep them in the same folder.

'Company's properties' is awkward; 'company's property' or simply 'company property' is better. Use 'such as' to introduce examples rather than 'like' here. Files are kept 'in' a folder, not 'on' a folder. Use present simple 'always keep' when describing habitual actions.

× Actually, I believe it depends on the person who manages their stuff.

✓ Actually, I believe it depends on how the person manages their stuff.

'Depends on the person who manages their stuff' is slightly awkward. Use 'depends on how the person manages their stuff' to clarify the condition being discussed.

× For example, if they are very organized but however they are relatively messy instead of tidy and they always know where they keep their things, such as a stationery at their tools, I think it's OK for them.

✓ For example, if they are relatively messy but still know where they keep their things, such as stationery or tools, I think it's OK for them.

Do not use 'but however' together; choose one conjunction. The phrase 'relatively messy instead of tidy' is wordy; condense to 'relatively messy.' 'Such as a stationery at their tools' is ungrammatical—use 'such as stationery or tools.' This revision clarifies meaning and improves word order.