Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), and use correct grammar for noun phrases and verb forms. Add one or two specific examples and a linking word to clarify cause/effect (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Keep your answer to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my belongings organized by purpose because it helps me find things quickly when I need them. For example, I keep stationery in one drawer and chargers in another, so I never waste time searching.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly about the past, using correct past tense. Avoid vague phrases like 'I don't remember' unless necessary. Give a brief contrast between past and present with a linking word (e.g., 'but' or 'however') and one specific detail about what changed.

Exemplo: Not really. As a child I was quite messy, but as I grew older I learned to organize my things. For instance, I started sorting toys and school supplies into boxes when I was a teenager.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and precise verbs. Use linking words such as 'first' or 'then' to show sequence. Describe one or two specific routines or methods (e.g., labeling, storage boxes) to make the answer more concrete and natural.

Exemplo: I keep my study space tidy by designating places for everything. First, I label drawers for pens, notebooks and chargers; then after using an item I always put it back in its labeled place.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion and support it with two clear reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'so'). Avoid fillers and informal phrases like 'that's all'. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'comfortable' and 'pleasant to the eye').

Exemplo: Yes, I believe being tidy is necessary because it improves efficiency and reduces stress. For example, a tidy desk helps me focus quickly, and a clean environment feels more comfortable and pleasant to the eye.

× I really like that my things umm, tidy, especially in organization being sorted according to its purpose and umm, being tidy makes me see or find the things that I want to do use in that given time or the things that I needed to use.

✓ I really like my things to be tidy, especially organized according to their purpose, because being tidy helps me see or find the things I need to use at a given time.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and word forms. 'That my things tidy' is ungrammatical; use an infinitive: 'like my things to be tidy'. 'Its purpose' should be 'their purpose' because 'things' is plural (singular and plural issue). 'Makes me see or find the things that I want to do use' is awkward and contains extra verbs; simplify to 'helps me see or find the things I need to use'. Combine clauses and use consistent tense and pronouns. Suggestion: identify the subject plurality and use matching pronouns, remove redundant verbs, and use clear relative clauses.

× When I was a child I didn't see my thing so tidy or I think I don't remember what happened during my childhood, but when I growing up being matured enough umm I really want my things to be tidy, organized, arrange according to its purpose or use usage.

✓ When I was a child I did not keep my things tidy, and I don't remember much from my childhood, but as I grew up and became more mature I really wanted my things to be tidy and organized according to their purpose.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'didn't see my thing so tidy' is incorrect — use 'did not keep my things tidy' to express past habit (past tense issue). 'I think I don't remember' mixes tenses; use 'I don't remember' or 'I did not remember' depending on meaning. 'When I growing up being matured enough' should be 'as I grew up and became more mature' (incorrect verb forms and participles). 'I really want' should be past 'I really wanted' to match the past time frame. 'Arrange according to its purpose or use usage' misuses pronouns and a redundant noun; use 'organized according to their purpose'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events, use correct past forms 'grew up', 'became', and match plural pronouns.

× Simply I makes my or I make my things arrange according to where did I put it or where did I arrange it.

✓ Simply, I make my things arranged according to where I put them.

The original has subject-verb disagreement: 'I makes' should be 'I make'. Word order is incorrect: questions word order 'where did I put it' was used in a statement — use 'where I put them'. 'Things' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. Also use past participle 'arranged' after 'make' in this context or rephrase to 'I arrange my things according to where I put them.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject, use statement word order, and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× And when I use things after making use of it, I'm putting it back to where it belong or placed.

✓ And when I use things, I put them back where they belong.

'After making use of it' is wordy and mixes singular/plural pronouns; simplify to 'when I use things'. 'I'm putting it back to' is incorrect preposition and progressive tense; use simple present 'I put them back'. 'Where it belong or placed' has subject-verb disagreement and passive confusion; use 'where they belong'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions (no 'to' after 'back' here), correct verb form and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Yeah, it is really important to be tidy in all the things you have or in the, umm, what things you have in your rooms or even in your workplace because it makes things easier for you.

✓ Yes, it is really important to keep everything tidy in your room or workplace because it makes things easier for you.

Word choice and redundancy issues: 'tidy in all the things you have' is awkward; use 'keep everything tidy'. 'In the, umm, what things you have in your rooms' is ungrammatical. 'Yeah' is informal, use 'Yes' in a more formal answer. Suggestion: choose concise adjectives and noun phrases, avoid redundancy, and use proper register.

× Umm, you feel comfort and it's not sore in the eye to see and that's all.

✓ You feel comfortable and it is not unpleasant to look at.

Incorrect word form: 'feel comfort' should be 'feel comfortable' (adjective). 'Not sore in the eye to see' is unnatural; use 'not unpleasant to look at' or 'easy on the eyes'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms after 'feel' and common idioms such as 'easy on the eyes' or 'pleasant to look at'.