Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), and give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Also use correct vocabulary (e.g., "organized" instead of "regulatory").

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because an organized space helps me concentrate. For example, I always put my books on the shelf and label my folders so I can find things quickly.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and clarify with a short specific example. Avoid hesitation and unclear words; use simple, correct phrases (e.g., "I wasn't very tidy" and "my mother helped me").

Exemplo: To be honest, I wasn't very tidy as a child. My mother often helped me tidy my room on weekends, putting toys in boxes and folding my clothes for me.

Sugestão: Use a clear sequence and specific details with linking words. Remove fillers and give one or two concrete methods (storage, labeling, routine).

Exemplo: First, I put pens and stationery in a desk organizer, and secondly I keep important papers in labeled folders so I don't waste time searching for them.

Sugestão: Express your opinion directly and support it with two clear reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "also"). Avoid trailing off; finish the sentence with a concrete result or example.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it saves time when you look for things and also reduces stress. For instance, when my desk is neat I can start work quickly and feel calmer.

× Yes I do umm keep things tidy, umm make me feel comfortable and umm make things feel like umm. Regulatory.

✓ Yes, I do. Keeping things tidy makes me feel comfortable and makes the environment feel orderly.

The original has adjective/adverb misuse and sentence fragments. 'Keep things tidy' should be a gerund 'Keeping things tidy' as the subject of 'makes'. 'Make me feel' needs third-person singular agreement with 'keeping things tidy' so use 'makes'. 'Regulatory' is incorrect word choice; use 'orderly' or 'organized'. Also add punctuation and remove filler words to form clear sentences. Suggestion: Use gerunds as subjects and match verb agreement; choose precise adjectives like 'orderly'.

× To be honest, as a child, I'm not that much tidy.

✓ To be honest, as a child I wasn't that tidy.

The speaker is referring to past time 'as a child' so present tense 'I'm' is incorrect. Use past tense 'wasn't'. Also 'that much tidy' is unidiomatic; say 'that tidy.' Suggestion: Match verb tense to time reference and use natural adjective placement: 'wasn't that tidy.'

× My mom, umm, help me to keep my room tidy.

✓ My mom helped me keep my room tidy.

Subject 'My mom' requires past tense verb 'helped' for a past action. 'Help me to keep' is acceptable but 'helped me keep' is more natural. This corrects pronoun/verb consistency and tense. Suggestion: Use past tense for past events and prefer 'helped me keep'.

× Uh, as a child, I'm not a very you GUI Hua, you children.

✓ As a child, I wasn't very tidy.

The original contains unintelligible words and broken structure. Replace unclear phrases with a clear adjective 'tidy' and use past tense 'wasn't' to match 'as a child.' Suggestion: Remove filler and unclear phrases and produce a concise statement.

× Uh, first I umm, put the uh, things in a special greeting holder place so I don't have to waste time finding for them looking.

✓ First, I put things in a special holder so I don't have to waste time looking for them.

Redundant words and incorrect gerund/infinitive usage: 'finding for them looking' is wrong. Correct collocation is 'looking for them.' Also 'greeting holder place' is wrong word choice; 'special holder' or 'storage container' fits. Maintain simple past 'put' for habitual present? If describing regular habit, 'I put' or 'I usually put' are acceptable. Suggestion: Use correct phrasal verb 'look for' and keep word order 'looking for them.' Use precise noun 'holder.'

× I think it's necessary because uh, keeping tidy can help you, uh, save your time, umm, and living, living in a tidy space can umm umm, make you feel comfortable and less stressed.

✓ I think it's necessary because keeping things tidy can save you time, and living in a tidy space can make you feel comfortable and less stressed.

Use 'keeping things tidy' (gerund phrase) and correct collocation 'save you time' rather than 'save your time.' Remove repeated words 'living, living' and filler. Verb forms are present and appropriate; just adjust noun phrase and collocations. Suggestion: Use 'keeping things tidy' and 'save you time'; avoid repetition and fillers.