Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, correct word choices (e.g., "put them in the cupboard"), and finish the sentence with a reason or feeling. Use one or two supporting details and link them (e.g., "so I..." or "because...").

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy, especially my work desk. After I finish work, I put papers and books back in the cupboard, because an orderly desk helps me feel calm and focused.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear past habit and contrast it with the present using linking words (e.g., "but now"). Reduce hesitations and correct verb forms ("played", "left my things around"). Provide one specific example to illustrate the change.

Exemplo: No, I didn't. When I was a child I usually left my toys and clothes on the floor after I played, but now I tidy my room every evening so it stays neat.

Sugestão: Make your method clear and use correct prepositions ("on the table", "in the cupboard"). Use one or two concise steps and link them ("first..., then..."). Explain briefly why you follow this routine with a clear reason.

Exemplo: I keep my workspace tidy by keeping only essential items on the table and storing everything else in a cupboard. First I work with what I need, then I put papers and books into the cupboard so I can find them easily later.

Sugestão: Express your opinion clearly with one strong reason and a short elaboration. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Use accurate vocabulary ("discipline", "self-respect", "consistency"). Provide a specific effect of being tidy (e.g., "better productivity" or "positive impression").

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because it shows self-discipline and respect. A tidy environment also improves productivity and gives others a positive impression of you.

× For example, after I finish the After finishing the work, I usually tid tidy up the documents, the books, uh, and I put at the cupboard.

✓ For example, after finishing my work, I usually tidy up the documents and books and put them in the cupboard.

The original contains redundant phrasing ('after I finish the After finishing') and incorrect verb forms. Use 'after finishing my work' or 'after I finish my work' — both are correct; here 'after finishing' is a reduced clause with a gerund. Also change 'tid tidy up' to 'tidy up' and use the correct object pronoun 'them' for 'documents and books'. Use the preposition 'in' with 'cupboard'. Suggestion: choose one structure ('after finishing' + noun or 'after I finish' + clause) and ensure the gerund form is used properly.

× and I put at the cupboard.

✓ and I put them in the cupboard.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'cupboard'. The correct preposition is 'in' for placing items inside furniture. Also include the object pronoun 'them' to refer back to the documents and books.

× I feel happy when.

✓ I feel happy when my desk is tidy.

The original is an incomplete sentence lacking a clause that completes 'when'. Provide a full subordinate clause to complete the thought. Ensure the tense and subject are included.

× After I play the game, I usually, uh, I left, I left the things at and I have, I didn't, umm, wrap it up, but for now, I become tadier.

✓ When I was a child, after I played games I usually left my things around and did not put them away, but now I have become tidier.

The original mixes present and past tenses and includes fragmented phrases. For past habitual actions in childhood, use past tense ('played', 'left', 'did not put'). Use 'have become' to indicate a change up to the present. Correct 'tadier' to 'tidier' and rephrase 'wrap it up' to 'put them away' for clarity.

× I usually put the important things uh, around the table.

✓ I usually put the important things on the table.

Use 'on' for objects placed on the surface of a table. 'Around the table' implies surrounding the table rather than being on its surface; choose the preposition that matches the intended meaning.

× After I finish the work, I put it back at the cupboard because sometimes I find it difficult uh to put uh, to seek the things I put at the table.

✓ After I finish work, I put them back in the cupboard because sometimes I find it difficult to find the things I put on the table.

Use 'in' with 'cupboard' and 'on' with 'table'. Replace 'seek' with the more natural verb 'find'. Ensure plural pronouns ('them') match 'things'.

× After I finish the work, I put it back at the cupboard because sometimes I find it difficult uh to put uh, to seek the things I put at the table.

✓ After I finish work, I put them back in the cupboard because sometimes I find it difficult to find the things I put on the table.

The original uses the singular pronoun 'it' to refer to multiple 'things'. Use 'them' for plural antecedents. Also correct prepositions as noted above and simplify verbs for clarity.

× I, we appreciate ourselves and people see our tidiness is the sign of discipline, consistent and how we love ourselves.

✓ I think it is important to be tidy because it shows that we appreciate ourselves; people see tidiness as a sign of discipline, consistency, and self-care.

The original has awkward adjective/adverb use and an unclear structure. 'Consistent' should be the noun 'consistency' to parallel 'discipline'. Rephrase to make meaning clear: 'tidiness as a sign of discipline, consistency, and self-care'. Also add 'it shows that' to connect ideas and correct pronoun phrasing.

× Uh, I think this is necessary to be tidy because, uh, I, we appreciate ourselves and people see our tidiness is the sign of discipline, consistent and how we love ourselves.

✓ I think it is necessary to be tidy because it shows we appreciate ourselves, and people see tidiness as a sign of discipline, consistency, and self-care.

The original sentence is disjointed and includes unnecessary pronoun switching ('I, we'). Restructure the sentence for clarity, maintain consistent subject ('we'), and use parallel noun forms ('discipline, consistency, self-care').