Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Use past tense consistently and correct verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went to the park with my mother because I was shy and felt more comfortable with her. We would walk together and do light exercises, which helped me relax and make friends.

Sugestão: Give a clear, natural response and explain when and why you go. Remove fillers and unclear words. Use linking words (for example, 'usually' or 'because') to connect ideas and provide specific details about time and purpose.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually go to the park in the evening because it is quiet and helps me relax after work. For example, I often walk or do light stretching there to clear my mind.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Use linking phrases like 'because' to explain benefits, and avoid hesitations. Provide one concrete example of how parks benefit people.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think more parks would be beneficial because they provide convenient public spaces where people can exercise and relax. For example, a new park with walking paths and exercise equipment would encourage more residents to be active and improve public health.

Sugestão: Be confident and use correct names and adjectives. Give a reason and a specific detail about what attracts you. Avoid repetition and fillers, and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'romantic', 'scenic').

Exemplo: In the future I would like to visit Namsan Park in Korea. I saw it in a film and was attracted by its beautiful views and romantic walking trails; I especially want to see the panoramic city views from the hilltops.

× Yes I did and when I was shy I usually go to the the parks with my mother.

✓ Yes, I did, and when I was shy I usually went to the parks with my mother.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was shy' and 'I did' with the present tense verb 'go'. Use past tense 'went' to maintain consistent past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when describing past habits (e.g., 'I usually went').

× We are working together and and and do exercise.

✓ We used to go together and exercise.

The original uses present continuous 'are working together' and repeated fillers 'and and and', causing ungrammatical structure. The speaker intends to describe a past habitual activity, so use 'used to' or past simple 'went' and a simple verb 'exercise'. Remove fillers and correct verb form.

× Yes, I do. I still like going to the to parks.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to the parks.

There is a duplicated preposition 'to the to' and the present tense 'I do' is fine. Correction removes the extra 'to'. Ensure only one article/preposition is used before 'parks'.

× Uh, I often do TH this activity, uh, uh, in the evening, uh, and this activity activity back with your relax.

✓ I often do this activity in the evening, and it helps me relax.

The original contains unclear fragments, filler words, and awkward phrasing 'this activity activity back with your relax'. Rephrase to clear, grammatical structure: subject + verb + object, and use 'helps me relax' to express the benefit.

× Yeah, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city and because this year, uh, convenient public place for uh, everyone to uh, do exercise or umm, do some activity good for our health.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide convenient public places for everyone to exercise or do activities that are good for our health.

The sentence is ungrammatical due to missing verbs and poor clause connection ('and because this year' is misplaced). Combine ideas clearly: 'because they provide' supplies the missing verb, use plural agreement 'places' to match 'parks', and use 'that are good for our health' for clarity.

× Uh, in the future, I want to go to the, uh, Namsan Nation park located in Korea.

✓ In the future, I want to go to Namsan National Park in Korea.

Use 'National' instead of 'Nation' as the correct adjective for the park name and remove unnecessary fillers and commas. 'Located in Korea' is acceptable, but 'in Korea' is more natural here.

× I, I saw this park in the movie and I want to go this place because it, because it looks so romance and beautiful.

✓ I saw this park in a movie and I want to visit this place because it looks so romantic and beautiful.

Use 'saw' (past) correctly for viewing the movie. Replace 'go this place' with 'visit this place' or 'go to this place'. 'Romance' is a noun; use the adjective 'romantic'. Ensure consistent verb forms and correct word choices.