Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise reasons. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unclear references (UH). Use linking words if you add details. For example, say whether you liked parks and explain why they were absent or inaccessible in your childhood.

Exemplo: I didn’t really go to parks as a child because I grew up in a small village without public gardens. As a result, we spent most of our free time playing in fields near our homes rather than in formal parks.

Sugestão: This answer is good: it has a clear topic sentence and a reason. Improve by removing fillers (uh), adding one linking word to expand slightly, and one specific detail about what you enjoy in the evenings to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I now live in the city and there is a park near my apartment, so I often go there in the evening to relax. For example, I like taking a short walk on the tree-lined path and watching people exercising.

Sugestão: Be clear whether you want more parks and explain why with coherent linking words. Correct contradictions (you first say maybe but then say parks are enough decorated). Give specific suggestions for features you would like (waterfalls, ponds) and explain their benefits.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks with water features such as small ponds or waterfalls because these elements would make the parks more relaxing and attract birds. Currently, the parks already have trees, benches and flowers, but adding water would improve the atmosphere.

Sugestão: Give a clear, direct answer with specific places and reasons. Avoid fillers and vague phrases like "other cultures greenhouse." Mention what attracts you to those countries' green spaces and give a short reason or example for each place.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit famous parks abroad. For instance, I want to see the Dubai Miracle Garden because of its huge floral displays, and I’d like to explore Uzbekistan’s historic gardens to learn about their traditional landscaping and cultural history.

× I can't remember whether I went to the parks during UH childhood because I live in village.

✓ I can't remember whether I went to parks during my childhood because I lived in a village.

Sentence has multiple issues: wrong article usage and tense and missing possessive. Change 'the parks' to 'parks' (general childhood visits), 'UH' seems filler—replace with 'my', 'in village' should be 'in a village', and tense should be past 'lived' to match 'went'. Also remove unnecessary definite article before parks. Improve fluency by reordering to 'during my childhood'. Suggested focus: use correct articles (a/an/the) and possessive adjectives and keep past tense consistent for past events.

× In the UH there is no such gardens nor green parks.

✓ In the village there were no gardens or green parks.

'There is no such gardens' mixes singular/plural and article usage. Use plural 'gardens' with 'no' and plural verb 'were' (past tense) to match past context. 'nor' is awkward; use 'or'. Replace 'UH' filler with 'the village'. Suggested focus: match verb tense to context and use 'no' with plural nouns properly.

× Sure, now I live in a city and uh, near my apartment there is a park and I really love going to parks, especially in the evening.

✓ Sure. Now I live in a city, and near my apartment there is a park. I really love going to parks, especially in the evening.

Run-on sentence and punctuation, but main grammar: 'there is a park' is correct. Improve clarity by splitting into two sentences. No tense change needed. Also adding commas and periods improves readability. Suggestions: separate ideas into sentences and maintain consistent present tense.

× Maybe, uh, it is waterfalls or ponds, like small ponds, uh, because I think, uh, the parks in my city are enough decorated.

✓ Maybe waterfalls or ponds, like small ponds, because I think the parks in my city are adequately decorated.

'it is waterfalls or ponds' is ungrammatical—use noun phrase without 'it is'. 'Enough decorated' is incorrect word order; use 'adequately decorated' or 'well decorated'. Remove filler 'uh' and streamline. Suggestion: use appropriate adverb (adequately/well) before past participle 'decorated'. Also: ensure noun phrases are correctly formed (e.g., 'Maybe waterfalls or ponds' not 'it is waterfalls').

× There are many trees, benches and flowers, etcetera.

✓ There are many trees, benches, and flowers.

'etcetera' is unnecessary after a short list and can be omitted. Commas: include Oxford comma for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: avoid 'etcetera' in short enumerations.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

Use polite conditional 'would like to' or 'want to visit' for future preferences; 'go to' is informal but acceptable. 'Visit' is more natural collocation with 'parks'. Suggestion: use 'would like to visit' for smoother, more natural phrasing.

× Yeah, sure. I've already been to many parks in my country, umm, and I wanna see other countries, uh, green spaces, for example Dubai or like uh, Uzbekistan and other umm, cultures greenhouse.

✓ Yeah, sure. I've already been to many parks in my country, and I want to see green spaces in other countries, for example Dubai or Uzbekistan and other cultural green spaces.

'wanna' is informal—use 'want to'. Phrase 'see other countries, green spaces' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'see green spaces in other countries'. 'cultures greenhouse' is incorrect collocation; use 'cultural green spaces' or 'green spaces in other cultures'. Keep present perfect 'I've already been' and use 'want to' for current desire. Suggestion: avoid informal contractions in formal speaking and use correct noun phrases and word order.